Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

think of a place that makes you feel relaxed and peaceful. describe it and why it is relaxing and peaceful for you. v.2

think of a place that makes you feel relaxed and peaceful. describe it and why it is relaxing and peaceful for you. v. 2
There are two different schools of thoughts about the mode of student selection in learning centres. Some people contend that mixed ability classes are more beneficial for children’s development, while others believe that streaming the students on the basis of their academic abilities, breeds the best result. In my point of view, having students interacted with various capabilities is of great importance in their upbringing. In the following paragraphs, a comprehensive discussion over both viewpoints will be stated in depth. Streaming students according to their academic qualifications, can facilitate effective teaching. For instance, teachers can simply develop an efficient instruction method which is applicable for all the top stream pupils. It can also pave the way for a high level and well-rounded education. Meaning that the student will be able to participate in more difficult scheduled lessons. On the minus side, by getting learners only focused on educational skills, hidden talents such as physical and artistic capabilities will be overlooked. The first and foremost outcome of mixed ability classrooms is providing a better environment for children’s many-sided improvement. In these types of classes, pupils can interact and study together and in turn, the can learn from one another. Furthermore, due to the competitive atmosphere, the bottom stream students will be forced to step up a gear in order to maintain the level of study required. In conclusion, although selecting students based on their scholastic achievements have many benefits, I still believe that mixed capacity classes have a more positive impact on children’s innovation and social graces.
There are two
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
schools of thoughts about the mode of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
selection in learning
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
contend that mixed ability classes are more beneficial for children’s development, while others believe that streaming the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
on the basis of their academic abilities, breeds the best result. In my point of view, having
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
interacted with various capabilities is of great importance in their upbringing. In the following paragraphs, a comprehensive discussion over both viewpoints will
be stated
in depth.

Streaming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
according to their academic qualifications, can facilitate effective teaching.
For instance
, teachers can
simply
develop an efficient instruction method which is applicable for all the top stream pupils. It can
also
pave the way for a high level and well-rounded education. Meaning that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
will be able to participate in more difficult scheduled lessons. On the minus side, by getting learners
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
focused on educational
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, hidden talents such as physical and artistic capabilities will
be overlooked
.

The
first
and foremost outcome of mixed ability classrooms is providing a better environment for children’s
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
-sided improvement. In these types of classes, pupils can interact and study together and in turn, the can learn from one another.
Furthermore
, due to the competitive atmosphere, the bottom stream
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
will
be forced
to step up a gear in order to maintain the level of study required.

In conclusion
, although selecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
based on their scholastic achievements have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
benefits, I
still
believe that mixed capacity classes have a more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impact on children’s innovation and social graces.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay think of a place that makes you feel relaxed and peaceful. describe it and why it is relaxing and peaceful for you. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts