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Last summer, I went out with my family to a beach in Nha Trang. My family rented a 35-seat car because we went with my grandparents, uncles and cousins, my family is very large. It took us six hours to get to Nha Trang. On the trip, we encountered a problem that delayed the ride, Our car had a problem, we had to wait a long time to be able to continue. That time was really exhausting. After 6 hours of traveling, we finally arrived at the hotel. But unfortunately, the hotel did not have enough rooms that we needed because we arrived 2 hours late than the scheduled time. Therefore, we were forced to move to another hotel, this place is quite far from the center but the hotel is also beautiful and comfortable. We were finally able to enjoy some time off with our family. Nha Trang beach is beautiful. And this is an unforgettable trip
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. My
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rented a 35-seat car
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large. It took us six hours to
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. On the trip, we encountered a problem that delayed the ride, Our car had a problem, we had to wait a long
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to be able to continue. That
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did not have
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rooms that we needed
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we arrived 2 hours
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.
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to another
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, this place is quite far from the center
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the
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is
also
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and comfortable. We were
finally
able to enjoy
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off with our
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.
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beach is
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. And this is an unforgettable
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IELTS essay Think of a good or bad journey you had and tell a story about that

Essay
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1 paragraphs
157 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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