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Some people believe that the whope family bringing up children is better rather than onlu parents. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that the whope family bringing up children is better rather than onlu parents. JKGEw
Undoubtedly, joint families are essential in this world. A handful of society deem that the entire members of family nurturing the toddlers is nore finest instead of only parents. I am in consummate accord with the given notion. I will elaborate my views regarding this in the subsequent fragments. To begin with, there is a plethora of reasons behind this thought but the predominating one is moral and ethichal values too. Juniors can learn moral anf ethical values from their grandparents as they are more beneficial for better raising uoof toddlers nevertheless, if they only live with their parents they get deprived from these things. Apart from it, wjile livong with other family members, juveniles can acquire more virtues like discipline, helping others and some others. Furthermore, in this cutting edge era, because mortals have hectic schedule, they cam not give proper time as well as attention to their young ones. As a consequence, their offsprings may become rude as well as abrupt. To overcome this situation, all household members are paramount for superior arising up of little ones as they take care of children in the absence of their guardians. What is more, living with the joint household members, adolescents can learn how to libe woth other masses and they can know the importance of joint family. In compendium, for the superior upbringing up of younsters, joint families are more crucial as young ones can acuire more traits while living with the menages.
Undoubtedly
,
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joint
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families
are essential in this world. A handful of society deem that the entire
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members
of
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family
nurturing the toddlers is
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parents. I am in consummate accord with the
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notion. I will elaborate my views regarding this in the subsequent fragments.

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with, there is a plethora of reasons behind this
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the predominating one is moral and
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ethical values from their grandparents as they are more beneficial for better raising
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with their parents they
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deprived from
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livong
with other
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family
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members
, juveniles can acquire more virtues like discipline, helping others and
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others.

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, in this cutting edge era,
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because
mortals have hectic schedule, they
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not give proper time
as well
as attention to their young
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ones
. As a consequence, their
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may become rude
as well
as abrupt. To overcome this situation, all household
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members
are paramount for superior arising up of
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little
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ones
as they take care of children in the absence of their guardians.
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, living with the
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joint
household
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members
, adolescents can learn how to
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libe
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woth
other
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masses and
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joint
family.

In compendium, for the superior upbringing up of
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younsters
,
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families
are more crucial as young
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can
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acuire
more traits while living with the
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the whope family bringing up children is better rather than onlu parents.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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