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The student rooms in a Australia university

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The picstures illustrate the tremendous difference between two types of student dorm at a university in Australia. Overall, it is obvious that remarkable difference in two layouts are the price, size, design and the number of people each room. According to the price, the first room is for two, which costs $350 per week while the others is only single occupant and costs $200. Moreover, both rooms have the same length, 6 meters, meanwhile the dorm for two people is wide as two times as the single one, 4 meters and 2. 5 meters, respectively. In term of design and features in two kinds of room, only the first room has the dining area in the heart. While this room is reorganized with the coming of bookshelf near bathroom and cupboards to divide room into bedrooms, the second one doesn't have this facilities. Having said that there are similar features between two rooms, both rooms are contain bathroom, desk for student, bed and other furniture, just different locations.
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illustrate the tremendous difference between two types of student dorm at a university in Australia.
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, it is obvious that remarkable difference in two layouts are the price, size, design and the number of
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. According to the price, the
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is for two, which costs $350 per week while the others is
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single occupant and costs $200.
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, both
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have the same length, 6 meters, meanwhile the dorm for two
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people
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wide as two times as the single one, 4 meters and 2. 5 meters,
respectively
. In term of design and features in two kinds of
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,
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first
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has the dining area in the heart. While this
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is reorganized
with the coming of bookshelf near bathroom and cupboards to divide
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room
into bedrooms, the second one doesn't have
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facilities. Having said that there are similar features between two
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, both
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IELTS essay The student rooms in a Australia university

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168 words
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