Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

These days, paying money about developing railways compared with spending money in public transport. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

These days, paying money about developing railways compared with spending money in public transport. 0B9D5
In several countries, some people believe that it is essential to pay lots of money on building new railroad lines for some quick trains which are between cities while, others think that it is better suggestion to invest money on enhancing public system of transportation. So before arriving on my opinion, both sides of the argument will be analyzed. discussing the first view, this idea might be better for who is passenger and travels a lot. In fact, for moving people among plenty of cities, this opinion is excellent however, it will has some drawbacks. In addition, If this intention which is remarkable,  is performed, there will not be any requirement for driving majority of cars which can be exhausting as well as no need for expanding substructure of transportation between two cities. On the contrary, some experts would not overlook that concentrating on public system of transportation in several cities is more important and considerable. Actually, If it was arranged, this idea would be the first and there are some opinion which are said; for having better hometown and modern life, it is extremely brilliant idea that people spend money on developing their public transportation and it is necessary. Moreover, being comfortable about living and residing in city is intensely important even If the system of transportation which is out of cities is not powerful. For instance, all people deserve to use best buses and taxis and subways and those are which were mentioned,  should be improved. To conclude and give my opinion, despite of some good points considered, I confidently believe that developing public transportation is more reasonable than railway lines because all residents in cities  need to have fantastic facilities and the railroad in out of city is not really necessary for them because they do not inhabit in roads.
In several countries,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believe that it is essential to pay lots of money on building new railroad lines for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quick trains which are between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
while, others
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that it is better suggestion to invest money on enhancing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
system of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
The usual proposition after "arriving" is "at" not "on". Did you mean "arriving at"?
arriving on
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opinion
, both sides of the argument will
be analyzed
.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
discussing
the
first
view, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
might be better for who is passenger and travels a lot. In fact, for moving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
among
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opinion
is excellent
however
, it will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "have"
has
 
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
drawbacks.
In addition
, If this intention which is remarkable,
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
is performed
, there will not be any requirement for driving majority of cars which can be exhausting
as well
as no need for expanding substructure of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
between two cities.

On the contrary
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
experts would not overlook that concentrating on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
system of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
in several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
is more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
and considerable. Actually, If it 
was arranged
, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
would be the
first
and there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opinion
which 
are said
; for having better hometown and modern life, it is
extremely
brilliant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
spend money on developing their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
and it is necessary.
Moreover
, being comfortable about living and residing in city is
intensely
 
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
even If the system of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
which is out of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
is not powerful.
For instance
, all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
deserve to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
best buses and taxis and subways and those are which 
were mentioned
,
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
should be 
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.

To conclude and give my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
opinion
,
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
 
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
points considered, I
confidently
believe that developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
is more reasonable than railway lines
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
all residents in cities
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
need to have fantastic facilities and the railroad in out of city is not
really
necessary for them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they do not inhabit in roads.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay These days, paying money about developing railways compared with spending money in public transport.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • These days, paying money about developing railways compared with spending money in public transport. To what extend do you agree or disagree?