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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. v.7

These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. v. 7
These days, according to the current world statistics we can clearly understand that the number of workers or students in overseas are enormously increasing. Many believe that it is highly recommended to get the education of foreign studying campuses in order to become a good specialist in a particular module, as well as, to have a well-paid appointment. However, despite this fact while being far from home there could be born several inconveniences respectively. In this essay I will give a balanced idea about foreign education by providing relevant examples. The biggest advantage of moving away from home is definitely fruitful in terms of broadening the perspective. Precisely, you will be surrounded by different faces from several cultures and you will have a chance to multiply the amount of friends, as well as, exchange with their idea, points of view and so on. All these opportunities will lead you to the rapid change of scenes, as to have a valuable rate of life. Another plus concerning to this is the best job esteem and facilities. In major European countries government pays quite a better attention the individuals by offering a deserving amount of money accordingly to their work. By this you develop your self esteem and have the full job satisfaction. What I want to express is that you will be enough encouraged in order to continue your profession career without any reluctance to the existing working standards. As the Moon has its dark side, our topic claims minuses as well. Despite the fact being around unfamiliar unity can be helpful in gaining confidence, many face culture shock in the early periods there. It is not that easy to get integrated into the society due to the fact that there is nobody who you can refer, as well as, to easily comprehend the dominant language. This may negatively effect on your office or studying productivity. In a nutshell, the main difficulty in beginning life abroad is self confidence, taking into consideration other factors including weather condition, cost of life and language barrier
These days, according to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
world statistics we can
clearly
understand that the number of workers or students in overseas are
enormously
increasing.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
believe that it is
highly
recommended to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the education of foreign studying campuses in order to become a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
specialist in a particular module, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
as, to have a well-paid appointment.
However
, despite this fact while being far from home there could
be born
several inconveniences
respectively
. In this essay I will give a balanced
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
about foreign education by providing relevant examples.

The biggest advantage of moving away from home is definitely fruitful in terms of broadening the perspective.
Precisely
, you will
be surrounded
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
faces from several cultures and you will have a chance to multiply the amount of friends, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
as, exchange with their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
, points of view and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on. All these opportunities will lead you to the rapid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of scenes, as to have a valuable rate of life.

Another plus concerning to this is the best job esteem and facilities. In major European
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "countries'" or "country's"?
countries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
pays quite a better attention the individuals by offering a deserving amount of money
accordingly
to their work. By this you develop your
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
self esteem
and have the full job satisfaction. What I want to express is that you will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
encouraged in order to continue your profession career without any reluctance to the existing working standards.

As the Moon has its dark side, our topic claims minuses as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
. Despite the fact being around unfamiliar unity can be helpful in gaining confidence,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
face culture shock in the early periods there. It is not that easy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
integrated into the society due to the fact that there is nobody who you can refer, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
as, to
easily
comprehend the dominant language. This may
negatively
Did you mean "affect"?
effect
on your office or studying productivity.

In a nutshell, the main difficulty in beginning life abroad is
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
self confidence
, taking into consideration other factors including weather condition, cost of life and language barrier
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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