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These days many university courses are offered through the Internet. Some people think that online teaching has advantage than conventional classroom teaching or lectures. While others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweighs the disadvantages. v.4

These days many university courses are offered through the Internet. Some people think that online teaching has advantage than conventional classroom teaching or lectures. While others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweighs the disadvantages. v. 4
It is often thought that these days a lot of educational institutes are providing their studies online. While some are of the opinion that online classes are having more positive sides in comparison with traditional classroom lectures. However, there is a group that thinks it can experience some negative effects. In my point of view, I totally believe that conventional classes are more beneficial. In the next paragraphs, I will discuss both of these views. The main benefit it that pupils are able to manage their time. The reason for this is that they can decide what time they want to revise. For example, this is significant for teenage mums who are not able to make spare time to develop in their career or education. In other words, it is a possibility to help certain people in this world to receive success in life. So that's why, it is really good to register in an online study. The disadvantage of this impact can be that it is not motivating. The reason for this is that there is no one else to support you during the journey. On top of that, it is difficult to stay focussed on your course without having other students. For instance, these pupils are intended to reach the same goal, which will also push you to the end of the course. All in all, it is not keeping you motivated when you are on your own. To conclude, a lot of universities are offering online studies. Some of them believe that it is advantages and others believe that is is disadvantageous. Furthermore, these courses can be good for people who are not having time to start education. However, it is a bit hard to finish it. The reason for this is that there is no motivation.
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that these days
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a lot of
educational institutes are providing their studies
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online
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some
are of the opinion that
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online
classes are having more
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positive
sides
in comparison
with traditional classroom lectures.
However
, there is a group that
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thinks
it can experience
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some
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negative
effects.

In my point of view, I
totally
believe that conventional classes are more beneficial. In the
next
paragraphs, I will discuss both of these views.

The main benefit it that pupils are able to manage their
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time
.
The reason for this is
that they can decide what
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time
they want to revise.
For example
, this is significant for teenage
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mums
who are not able to
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make
spare
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time
to develop in their career or education.
In other words
, it is a possibility to
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help
certain
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people
in this world to receive success in life.
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So
that's why, it is
really
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good
to register in an
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online
study.

The disadvantage of this impact can be that it is not motivating.
The reason for this is
that there is no one else to support you during the journey.
On top of that
, it is difficult to stay focussed on your course without having other students.
For instance
, these pupils
are intended
to reach the same goal, which will
also
push you to the
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end
of the course. All in all, it is not keeping you motivated when you are on your
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own
.

To conclude
,
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a lot of
universities are offering
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online
studies.
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Some
of them believe that it is advantages
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and others
believe that
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is is
disadvantageous.
Furthermore
, these courses can be
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good
for
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people
who are not having
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time
to
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start
education.
However
, it is a bit
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hard
to finish it.
The reason for this is
that there is no motivation.
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IELTS essay These days many university courses are offered through the Internet. Some people think that online teaching has advantage than conventional classroom teaching or lectures. While others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweighs the disadvantages. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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