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23. Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by governments or should it be responsible of the people for these service. Discuss with the example. v.5

23. Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by governments or should it be responsible of the people for these service. Discuss with the example. v. 5
Education and health care are two of the local citizens's survival factors in societies and the charge to assess them varies in terms of local governments. Some people advocate that governments should be responsible for funding them completely; while, others insist that it is people's personal tasks.  The essay will discuss both views and presents my personal opinion as well. To begin with, universal health care and education coverage will enhance the local residents' happiness for which they are more  willing to contribute themselves to their nations.  As a result, nations will become more powerful and competitive because of their strong and well-educated citizens. For example, Bhutan is one of the small Asian countries with free access to these two services since its beginning for which it has become one of the countries with highest National Happiness Index and the strongest military force. Free access to these services will provide a harmonious environment for residents to grow and raise their families. However, people who are again the universal coverage of health care and education believe that these services will increase chances for patients or health care professionals to abuse the systems if they do not strictly follow guidelines. Moreover, if patients or university students are required to pay fees partially or totally, they may have access to these two services more rationally. For instance, in Canada, the waiting time for patients in the ER are extremely long because this service is free. If Canadians are required to pay this fee partially in the ER,  they may feel hesitate and only severe sick patients are willing to visit the ER. As a result,   private healthcare and education will reduce government's financial burden and taxpayers' as well. In conclusion,   people who support universal health care and education coverage or not have individual above reasons.  Free health care and education definitely make ordinary residents happier and less stressful by eliminating the financial burden of medical bills and education tuition. However, in order to maintain these two services's qualities, clients should have access to them properly or they will collapse and local citizens will suffer.
Education
and
health
care
are two of the
local
citizens's
survival factors in societies and the charge to assess them varies in terms of
local
governments
.
Some
people
advocate that
governments
should be responsible for funding them completely; while, others insist that it is
people
's personal tasks.  The essay will discuss both views and presents my personal opinion
as well
.

To
begin
with, universal
health
care
and
education
coverage will enhance the
local
residents' happiness for which they are more
 
willing to contribute themselves to their nations.  
As a result
, nations will become more powerful and competitive
because
of their strong and well-educated citizens.
For example
, Bhutan is one of the
small
Asian countries with
free
access
to these two services since its beginning for which it has become one of the countries with
highest
National Happiness Index and the strongest military force.
Free
access
to these
services
will provide a harmonious environment for residents to grow and raise their families.

However
,
people
who are again the universal coverage of
health
care
and
education
believe that these
services
will increase chances for patients or
health
care
professionals to abuse the systems if they do not
strictly
follow guidelines.
Moreover
, if patients or university students
are required
to pay fees
partially
or
totally
, they may have
access
to these two
services
more
rationally
.
For instance
, in Canada, the waiting time for patients in the ER are
extremely
long
because
this
service
is
free
. If Canadians
are required
to pay this fee
partially
in the ER,
 
they may feel hesitate and
only
severe sick patients are willing to visit the ER.
As a result
,
  
private healthcare and
education
will
reduce
government
's financial burden and taxpayers' 
as well
.

In conclusion
,
 
people
who support universal
health
care
and
education
coverage or not have individual above reasons.
 Free
health
care
and
education
definitely
make
 ordinary residents happier and less stressful by eliminating the financial burden of medical bills and
education
tuition.
However
, in order to maintain these two
services's
qualities, clients should have
access
to them
properly or
they will collapse and
local
citizens will suffer.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay 23. Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by governments or should it be responsible of the people for these service. Discuss with the example. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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