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These days majority of individuals decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization.

These days majority of individuals decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. There might be some reasons to being self-employed and also negative consequences of it. The main causes that I believe why many people choose to run their own business rather than to work for other companies are that they want to have flexible working hours or because of modern technologies that provide an opportunity to work at their own. Firstly, many people in all likelihood prefer to be independent so that they can plan their working schedule how it is suitable for them and not to follow the rules that set by companies which probably will offer a chance to keep work-life balance as a lot of people find difficult to manage it working long hours in other organizations or companies. Secondly, thanks to state-of-the-art technologies human beings can work privately and establish their own business. For example, nowadays IT specialists may obviously leave the company that they work and do their job at home or in their office by advertising their work on the social media and get clients as well as earn even more money. While there are decided reasons mentioned above, launching own business could be disadvantageous. To begin with, lack of experience and knowledge of some youngsters in the spare of running their own business can lead to difficulties in terms of solving problems and considering the wider implications of their actions. As a result, it is possible that they will go bankrupt and be in terrible predicament. Moreover, many companies provide health insurance and guarantee pension and other benefits but self-employed people should maintain these themselves which are not cheap and might also bring problems to them. In conclusion, although flexibility in a work place and advanced technologies could be considered as contributors to this recent work shifting trend, it can also have negative impact on people’s business especially for young ones.
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or organization. There might be
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consequences of it.

The main causes that I believe why
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people
choose to run their
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rather
than to
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work
for other
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companies
are that they want to have flexible
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working
hours or
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because
of modern technologies that provide an opportunity to
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work
at their
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own
.
Firstly
,
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many
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people
in all likelihood prefer to be independent
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so
that they can plan their
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working
schedule how it is suitable for them and not to follow the
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rules
that set by
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companies
which
probably
will offer a chance to
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keep
work-life balance as
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a lot of
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people
find difficult to manage it
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working
long hours in other organizations or
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companies
.
Secondly
, thanks to state-of-the-art technologies human beings can
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work
privately
and establish their
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own
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business
.
For example
, nowadays IT specialists may
obviously
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leave
the
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company
that they
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work
and do their job at home or in their office by advertising their
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work
on the social media and
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get
clients
as well
as earn even more money.

While there
are decided
reasons mentioned above, launching
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own
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business
could be disadvantageous. To
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begin
with, lack of experience and knowledge of
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some
youngsters in the spare of running their
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own
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business
can lead to difficulties in terms of solving problems and considering the wider implications of their actions.
As a result
, it is possible that they will go bankrupt and be in terrible predicament.
Moreover
,
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many
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companies
provide health insurance and guarantee pension and other benefits
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but
self-employed
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people
should maintain these themselves which are not
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cheap
and might
also
bring problems to them.

In conclusion
, although flexibility in a
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work
place and advanced technologies could
be considered
as contributors to this recent
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work
shifting trend, it can
also
have
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negative
impact on
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people’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
especially
for young ones.
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IELTS essay These days majority of individuals decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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