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These days, it is easier than ever for people to travel to different places. As a result, many locations that used to be free of tourists have now become popular tourist destinations. Do you feel this is a positive or negative development?

These days, it is easier than ever for people to travel to different places. As a result, many locations that used to be free of tourists have now become popular tourist destinations. Do you feel this is a positive or negative development? PVeOE
Humankind’s development has been illustrating a number of outcomes nowadays, and one of them is the sector of tourism as a result of human species’ social habitats. On foot, persons are able to see the abundance of historical places at the moment as well as this industry’s effects are widespread because a plethora of states’ economies are connected with the industry of tourism, but also these pons are becoming easier than the past because there is a globalization phrase in our lives currently. About the economy, if a country wants to cultivate itself more independently, numerous money ought to be there, thus many places are waiting to attract a number of visitors; for instance, Turkey is a holiday nation in the light of the country’ seas, further their economies are depend on foreigners mostly, and then when a supernatural happen shows up in our realities, citizens’ economies are dropped, consequently, the solely cash resources should not to be merely the sector of tourism. Not only Turkey’s circumstances are under the threat like that but also a plenty of nations based on the sector, specifically Paris. (? ) On the other hand, a variety of cultural diversity has appeared while both inventions and freedom are going forward to be more independent; besides, one of the effects is the globalizations. In the past, humankind was unable to travel easily than now so that genes were more stable such as a black person and a Chinese human can have a baby, otherwise, they would have lived in their region likely. To conclude, cosmopolitan territories are increasing as well as a plethora of places’ economies are related to the business department, which is called tourism. Therefore, strengths are more than weaknesses so that the essential component to cultivate ourselves is the department as a result of modernist mankind.
Humankind’s development has been illustrating a number of outcomes nowadays, and one of them is the sector of
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tourism
as a result
of human species’ social habitats. On foot, persons are able to
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see
the abundance of historical places at the moment
as well
as this industry’s effects are widespread
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because
a plethora of states’
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economies
are connected
with the industry of
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tourism
,
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but
also
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these pons
are becoming easier than the past
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because
there is a globalization phrase in our
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lives
currently
.

About the
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economy
, if a country wants to cultivate itself more
independently
, numerous money ought to be there,
thus
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many
places are waiting to attract a number of visitors;
for instance
, Turkey is a holiday nation in the light of the country’ seas,
further
their
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economies
are
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depend
on foreigners
mostly
, and then when a supernatural happen
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shows
up in our realities, citizens’
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economies
are dropped
,
consequently
, the
solely
cash resources should not to be
merely
the sector of
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tourism
. Not
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only
Turkey’s circumstances are under the threat like that
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but
also
a
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plenty
of nations based on the sector,
specifically
Paris. (?
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)


On the other hand
, a variety of cultural diversity has appeared while both inventions and freedom are going forward to be more independent;
besides
, one of the effects is the
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globalizations
. In the past, humankind was unable to travel
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easily
than
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now
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so
that genes were more stable such as a black person and a Chinese human can have a baby,
otherwise
, they would have
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lived
in their region likely.

To conclude
, cosmopolitan territories are increasing
as well
as a plethora of places’
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economies
are related
to the business department, which
is called
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tourism
.
Therefore
, strengths are more than weaknesses
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so
that the essential component to cultivate ourselves is the department
as a result
of modernist mankind.
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IELTS essay These days, it is easier than ever for people to travel to different places. As a result, many locations that used to be free of tourists have now become popular tourist destinations. Do you feel this is a positive or negative development?

Essay
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3 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
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