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These days children do not have meals with their family members which would cause some social problems. What are the causes of this trend? What can be done to tackle this issue.

These days children do not have meals with their family members which would cause some social problems. What are the causes of this trend? What can be done to tackle this issue. 6dmeK
In todays world with developing into the modern one, by huge number of invention, in compare with past, one of the major effect of this, is the gap between teenagers and their parents which appears in their behavior, activities or even the time which they prefer to spent with their friends rather than their families. Increasing these behaviors would probably cause some social matters which should be concerned. In this essay I am going to figure out the reasons and the solutions of this trend. First of all, developing the technolodgy has significant effect in creating the gap between their parents, which appears in their activities or hobbies that in some situation is totally different from their families. For example, by launching new games or new movies that is so popular between themselves, they decided to have a time with their peers having meals with playing games or watching movies at the same time, while this trend isn’t always acceptable for their parents. The second reasone for this trend can be seen in their mindset bringing some disagreement and problem with the old persons in their family. As a consequence, they may not have mutual converstation with their families. With countinuing this trend, not only it puts childrens relationship with their family in a dangerous way, but it also bring social problems, too. One of the things that can be done for solving one part of this problem is that parents should up to date themselves that can help them to have much more mutual converstation with their children. For example, by going to live competition games like football, vollybal, swimming, etc, with their child, or even playing games with them at home can be effective. The other solution which can be benefitial for their relationship is that they can get together in some occational events, going out and having family meals at weekend, having picnic making both the children and parents pleasant that bring enjoyment time for both of them and other activites that can bring all family member together for keeping their relationship is essential. In conclusion, Altough this trend that happened is common because of the difference between their generation, by doing some simple activity which include different interest of all ages, can keeping their warm families ties which leads to having family meals and other similar hobbies.
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which appears in their behavior, activities or even the
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. In this essay I am going to figure out the reasons and the solutions of this trend.

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, which appears in their activities or hobbies that in
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.
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games
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popular between themselves, they decided to have a
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time
with their peers
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having
meals with playing
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games
or watching movies at the same
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in their mindset bringing
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. As a consequence, they may not have mutual
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converstation
with their families.

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parents
should up to date themselves that can
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help
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with them at home can be effective. The other solution which can be
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some
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occational
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having
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family
meals at weekend,
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picnic making both the children and
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parents
pleasant that bring enjoyment
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time
for both of them and other
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activites
that can bring all
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family
member together for keeping their relationship is essential.

In conclusion
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that happened is common
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of the difference between their generation, by doing
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some
simple activity which include
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different
interest of all ages, can keeping their warm
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families
ties which leads to
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having
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family
meals and other similar hobbies.
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IELTS essay These days children do not have meals with their family members which would cause some social problems. What are the causes of this trend? What can be done to tackle this issue.

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4 paragraphs
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