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There is increasing pressure to ban smoking in all public areas as well as inside public buildings such as offices and restaurants. However many smokers claim that is an infringement

There is increasing pressure to ban smoking in all public areas as well as inside public buildings such as offices and restaurants. However many smokers claim that is an infringement LBr0V
In there are many drawback, it remain the right for smokers to have an zone to smoke. If the government and private sector make a law for smoking behavior with suitable punishment and design smoking area, it will be likely to live better among many groups in a society Smokers has got much pressure to be banned in all public spaces including in private buildings. On the one hand, some people who smoke has criticized that is an infringement in their rights. Although it is clear that banning smoke has many benefits for everyone, smokers should have the rights and some spaces to smoke. The essay will be discussion about the advantages of banning smoke in all public areas and the disadvantaged of it. It is certainly true that banning smoke can have two primary benefits. The most important of these is the benefits for health. While people are smoking, chemical compounds in cigarette lead to various diseases and healthy problems particular in lung cancer. Second smokers can also have the effect on smoke floating in the air from anyone who smokes. Due to some academic research, people who are close to smokers tend to get diseases more risky than people who actually smoke. For instance, in a family, children could be affected from hazardous chemical waste on their shirts or dress after their parents smoke, even though they did from the outside. Another reason that people who smoke should be banned, it reduce pollutions because cigarette frequently was found in the river and the sea. Consequently, fishes cannot digest it, if they eat it. There are many evidence that there are a noticeable increase in the number of death cases especially in turtle during 10 years. On the contrary, there are many reasons why banning smoke in all public areas is not completely the right thing to do. First of all, smoking is not illegal. People have the right to smoke unless it is harmful to anyone. Moreover, some research claims that people with stress and high pressure are like to smoke with the aim of reducing their mental problem. If there were banning smoke in all areas, people would possibly get more serious health problems. All public and private area should be designed for smoking area. It is quite not possible that there will have none smokers in the town. The government should take action for banning smoke and smoking policy in order to keep the right for smokers and be protect other from the effect of smoking. In conclusion. Even though banning smoke is better for every life in health and environment issue, people who smoke should not be left behind from society. In my opinion, the government is on duty to provide smoking areas for smokers on the ground that people who smoke have the right to do it.
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many drawback
, it
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remain
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right
for smokers to have
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an
zone to
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smoke
. If the
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government
and private sector
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make
a law for
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smoking
behavior with suitable punishment and design
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smoking
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area
, it will be likely to
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live
better among
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many
groups in a society

Smokers has
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got
much pressure to
be banned
in all
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public
spaces including in private buildings. On the one hand,
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some
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people
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who
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smoke
has criticized
that is
an infringement in their
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rights
. Although it is
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that
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banning
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smoke
has
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many
benefits for everyone, smokers should have the
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rights
and
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some
spaces to
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smoke
. The essay will be discussion about the advantages of
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banning
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smoke
in all
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public
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areas
and
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the disadvantaged of
it.

It is
certainly
true that
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banning
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smoke
can have two primary benefits. The most
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important
of these is the benefits for health. While
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people
are
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smoking
, chemical compounds in cigarette lead to various diseases and healthy problems particular in lung cancer. Second smokers can
also
have the effect on
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smoke
floating in the air from anyone
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who
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smokes
. Due to
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some
academic research,
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people
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who
are close to smokers tend to
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get
diseases more risky than
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people
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who
actually
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smoke
.
For instance
, in a family, children could be
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affected
from hazardous chemical waste on their shirts or dress after their parents
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smoke
,
even though
they did from the outside. Another reason that
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people
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who
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smoke
should
be banned
, it
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reduce
pollutions
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because
cigarette
frequently
was found
in the river and the sea.
Consequently
, fishes cannot digest it, if they eat it. There are
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many evidence
that there are a noticeable increase in the number of death cases
especially
in turtle during 10 years.

On the contrary
, there are
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many
reasons why
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banning
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smoke
in all
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public
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areas
is not completely the
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right
thing to do.
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First of all
,
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smoking
is not illegal.
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People
have the
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right
to
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smoke
unless it is harmful to anyone.
Moreover
,
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some
research claims that
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people
with
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stress
and high pressure are like to
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smoke
with the aim of reducing their mental problem. If there were
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banning
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smoke
in all
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areas
,
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people
would
possibly
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get
more serious health problems. All
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public
and private
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area
should
be designed
for
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smoking
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area
. It is quite not possible that there will have none smokers in the town. The
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government
should take action for
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banning
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smoke
and
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smoking
policy in order to
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keep
the
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right
for smokers and be
Consider using a past participle here: "protected".
protect
other from the effect of smoking.

In conclusion
.
Even though
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banning
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smoke
is better for every life in health and environment issue,
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people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
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smoke
should not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
behind from society. In my opinion, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is on duty to provide
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smoking
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areas
for smokers on the ground that
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people
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who
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smoke
have the
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right
to do it.
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IELTS essay There is increasing pressure to ban smoking in all public areas as well as inside public buildings such as offices and restaurants. However many smokers claim that is an infringement

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
473 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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