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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

First of all, Universe is not a toy held by children to keep them enterained. One should consider his own acts made occasionally to protect universe from gradual erosion represented in one of the main problems that faces the us which is the global warming. First global warming is a natural phenomenon that threatens our lives. It is caused as a result of increasing temperature owing to various reasons. Second, causes are classified into natural and artificial ones. Artificial causes are to be analysed more in details in this topic. It is represented in man made acts done by his complete free will. These acts include fire works. There is no doubt that all of us like seeing that magnificent art in new year carnavals. However, these shows in Dubai, USA and even the whole word is foolishness and in my opinion an act of bunch of uneducated people who have been taught unwell enough to repeat the same action annually. Consequently we should put more effort in our curriculums to provid enough background that speaks pure logic that prohibits such habits and traditions. Furthermore, developing countries rather than developed countries contributes more to this phenomenon. On one side, a lot of folks till this moment still burn their wastes in the streets where lack of education, hygiene and sanitation is completely obvious. On the side, car gases contributes as well where cars run by fuel are still used more than ones run by electricity as in developed countries. To cut a long story short, universe suffers everyday from men ignorance that is represented in multiple forms. In my opinion, the solution lies within the key of education which is enough to correct and enlighten corrupted minds.
First of all
, Universe is not a toy held by children to
keep
them
enterained
. One should consider his
own
acts
made
occasionally
to protect universe from gradual erosion represented in one of the main problems that faces the
us
which is the global warming.

First
global warming is a natural phenomenon that threatens our
lives
. It
is caused
as a result
of increasing temperature owing to various reasons. Second, causes
are classified
into natural and artificial
ones
. Artificial causes are to be
analysed
more in
details
in this topic. It
is represented
in
man
made
acts
done by his complete free will. These
acts
include fire works. There is no doubt that all of us like seeing that magnificent art in new year
carnavals
.
However
, these
shows
in Dubai, USA and even the whole word is foolishness and in my opinion an
act
of bunch of uneducated
people
who have
been taught
unwell
enough
to repeat the same action
annually
.
Consequently
we should put more effort in our curriculums to
provid
enough
background that speaks pure logic that prohibits such habits and traditions.
Furthermore
,
developing countries
rather
than
developed countries
contributes more to this phenomenon. On one side,
a lot of
folks till this moment
still
burn their wastes in the streets where lack of education, hygiene and sanitation is completely obvious. On the side, car gases contributes
as well
where cars run by fuel are
still
used
more than
ones
run by electricity as in
developed countries
.

To
cut
a long story short, universe suffers
everyday
from
men
ignorance that
is represented
in multiple forms. In my opinion, the solution lies within the key of education which is
enough
to correct and enlighten corrupted minds.
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IELTS essay There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem?

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287 words
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