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There is great burden of studies on modern student.They are taught subjects which have a little or no relevant.IT is proposed that hobby classes should be introduced in schools .Do you agree or disgaree

There is great burden of studies on modern student. They are taught subjects which have a little or no relevant. IT is proposed that hobby classes should be introduced in schools. Do you agree or disgaree L3GKR
Education is the key to development and progression of a country. It is commonly seen that in developing countries the importance of education has been recognised and students are obligied to study beyond an acceptable limit. This has caused various serious bproblems among students like stress, depression, opression etc. To overcome this issue there are many who put forward the ideo of introducing hobby classes in schools, and I do support this idea. "All study no play, makes makes jack a dull boy". which defines study without play can have dangerous repercussions. It is generally seen that in developing county like India, students are reeling under the pressure of study. Firstly a lot of classwork and then tons of homework speak about the miserable condition of students. The physchologists all around the world are unomimus on the idea of that too much work and monotonus work lead to a sharp decline in the work efficiency of a person and same is true in the case of students. Thus, they should be given some relaxation and ventilation in the form of hobby classes. In addition, we should not overlook the fact that education is meant for the holistiy development of a child, which is only possible if the study is complemented with other activities. Not only this hobby classes would not let children fall in wrong paths and will keep them on constructive path. What is more, hobby classes will not only provide relaxation to students, but will help them in grooming and developing good quality like IQ, WIT, Leadership skills, personalty development etc. In crux, hobby classes seen to have a large number of benefits to students, hence they should be introduced in ecah and every school. It is an investment which will pay a rich divident in future. However, hobby classes should be voluntary in choice, not a complusion.
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that in
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developing countries
the importance of education has been
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and
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students
are
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obligied
to
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beyond an acceptable limit. This has caused various serious
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among
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students
like
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stress
, depression,
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opression
etc. To overcome this issue there are
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many
who put forward the
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ideo
of introducing
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hobby
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classes
in schools, and I do support this
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idea
.

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study
no play,
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makes
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makes
jack a dull boy
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.
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which
defines
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study
without play can have
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dangerous
repercussions. It is
generally
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seen
that in developing county like India,
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students
are reeling under the pressure of
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study
.
Firstly
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a lot of
classwork and then tons of homework speak about the miserable condition of
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students
. The
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physchologists
all around the world are
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unomimus
on the
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idea
of that too much work and
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monotonus
work lead to a sharp decline in the work efficiency of a person and same is true in the case of
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students
.
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, they should be
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given
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some
relaxation and ventilation in the form of
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hobby
classes.

In addition
, we should not overlook the fact that education
is meant
for the
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holistiy
development of a child, which is
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only
possible if the
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study
is complemented
with other activities. Not
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only
this
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hobby
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classes
would not
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let
children fall in
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wrong
paths and will
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keep
them on constructive path.
What is more
,
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hobby
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classes
will not
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only
provide relaxation to
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students
,
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but
will
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help
them in grooming and developing
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good
quality like IQ, WIT, Leadership
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, personalty development etc.

In crux,
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hobby
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classes
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seen
to have
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a large number of
benefits to
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students
,
hence
they should
be introduced
in
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ecah
and every school. It is an investment which will pay a rich
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divident
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in future
.
However
,
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hobby
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classes
should be voluntary in choice, not a
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complusion
.
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IELTS essay There is great burden of studies on modern student. They are taught subjects which have a little or no relevant. IT is proposed that hobby classes should be introduced in schools. Do you agree or disgaree

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