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While many people argue that online shopping has personal and environmetal risk others may believe that that of benefits ensure to be straightforward life.

While many people argue that online shopping has personal and environmetal risk others may believe that that of benefits ensure to be straightforward life. kLboK
The time cashless society become realty is drawing nearer and nearer. Products and services can be bought in online platforms which let to use credit cards or debit cards by people. While many people argue that online shopping has personal and environmetal risk others may believe that that of benefits ensure to be straightforward life. Altought there are many risk in online shopping, it is important interms of easyness. Firstly, When looked at risk factors, people believe that credentials such as ıd card information, secret informations and personal informations or Money in their bank account would be stolen by online rubbery. However, Unless they use website which is not designed securely, this stituation would not become realty. For instance, Many securely online web sites inculede securly letters which are https in their links. Furthermore, the banks, which work with securely online shopping sites, do not let to buy something as you do not confirme the code from sending bank. On the contrast of risks, Online shopping have many advatages that makes people’s life easy. People do not need to go far away for shopping because they can reach all goods by a click. When people sit on sofa, they can choose goods on TV or Computer. Therefore consumers spend short time on shopping. For instance, a mother would have short of time to prepare meal for her child and the mother would need clean house simultaneously. If the mother use online shopping for meals, the mother does not neglect neither her child nor home chores. Moreover, many factories or stores sell their products cheaper than their stores on online. Hence, Consumers spend less money on products. Also they does not to carry lots of money with them, a credit card can buy everything. Another advantage is for employers that spend less money on store price, staff price and this situation trigger to make discount. In addition, Online shopping ensures that people can shop all over the World by online. An important example is from nowadays. In the covid-19 times, Even though bigger proportion of people was locked in their houses, they was met with needs by online shopping. In the conclusion, the advantages of online shopping can not count with examples and explanations. These disadvantages can beat with logical behavior such as using securly web sites and verified web sites by banks. The old stylish ideas are vain. People should use the technologhy for their targets. Similarly People should enjoy that remain from online shopping such as times, money and merchandises.
The
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time
cashless society become realty is drawing nearer and nearer. Products and services can be
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bought
in
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online
platforms which
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let
to
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use
credit
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cards
or debit
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cards
by
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people
. While
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many
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people
argue that
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online
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shopping
has personal and
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environmetal
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risk
others may believe
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that that
of benefits ensure to be straightforward life.
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Altought
there are
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many
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risk
in
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online
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shopping
, it is
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important
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interms
of
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easyness
.

Firstly
, When looked at
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risk
factors,
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people
believe that credentials such as
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ıd
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card
information, secret
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informations
and personal
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informations
or
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Money
in their bank account would
be stolen
by
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online
rubbery.
However
, Unless they
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use
website which is not designed
securely
, this
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stituation
would not become realty.
For instance
,
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Many
securely
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online
web
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sites
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inculede
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securly
letters which are
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https
in their links.
Furthermore
, the banks, which work with
securely
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online
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shopping
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sites
, do not
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let
to
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buy
something as you do not
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confirme
the code from sending bank.

On the contrast of
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risks
,
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Online
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shopping
have
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many
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advatages
that
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makes
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people’s
life easy.
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People
do not need to go far away for
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shopping
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because
they can reach all
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goods
by a click. When
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people
sit on sofa, they can choose
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goods
on TV or Computer.
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Therefore
consumers spend short
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time
on
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shopping
.
For instance
, a
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mother
would have short of
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time
to prepare meal for her child and the
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mother
would need clean
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house
simultaneously
. If the
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mother
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use
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online
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shopping
for meals, the
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mother
does
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not neglect neither
her child nor home chores.
Moreover
,
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many
factories or stores sell their products cheaper than their stores on
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online
.
Hence
, Consumers spend less
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money
on products.
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Also
they
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does
not to carry lots of
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money
with them, a credit
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card
can
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buy
everything. Another advantage is for employers that spend less
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money
on store price, staff price and this situation trigger to
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make
discount.
In addition
,
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Online
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shopping
ensures that
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people
can shop all over the World by
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online
. An
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important
example is from nowadays. In the
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covid-19
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times
,
Even though
bigger proportion of
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people
was locked
in their
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houses
, they
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was
met with needs by
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online
shopping.

In the conclusion, the advantages of
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online
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shopping
can not count with examples and explanations. These disadvantages can beat with logical behavior such as using
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securly
web
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sites
and verified web
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sites
by banks. The
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old
stylish
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ideas
are vain.
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People
should
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use
the
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technologhy
for their targets.
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Similarly
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People
should enjoy that remain from
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online
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shopping
such as
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times
,
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money
and merchandises.
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IELTS essay While many people argue that online shopping has personal and environmetal risk others may believe that that of benefits ensure to be straightforward life.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
421 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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