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There is a trend of increasing competitiveness in today’s society. Is this a positive or negative development?

There is a trend of increasing competitiveness in today’s society. Is this a positive or negative development? WgOKk

To begin with, the reason why I believe this trend is a welcoming development is that it makes people have a strong will to reach their goals. In modern society, people have to cope with many issues: jobs, studies, families, which are combined into a mountain of challenges that puts a heavy pressure in their daily life. Moreover, it is true that the more modern the society is, the more talented the people will appear. The existence of them will make the others find goals hard to reach. Consequently, the competitiveness in each person will soon appear and encourage them to try to become better than the others, and to overcome the challenges as well. Thus, if they always try to do their best, to become better than the others, the road to success will not be endless. That’s why the increment of competitiveness is vital and essential.

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