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talk about one form of mass media that you use everyday and explain how you benefit from using it

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Nowadays most people in the world have had a contact with computers. A majority of them has been using international computer's network known as the Internet -the mass media you often work On my view, using internet has more advantages than disadvantages. Firstly, the Internet provides access to a lot of information. Some of them are very useful in your job other helps in your hobby. Searching with Google, you can find everything you want. You can do shopping through the Internet. Of course, it has no sense to buying a roll, but if you need something inaccessible, you will be able to buy it in Internet shop. You just need only to select what you want, fill in some forms and click ok. In a few days, you will get what you have ordered to your home directly, without going anywhere. You also can pay with your credit card, pay postman when you get the package, or transfer money from your bank account. Today, almost bigger bank offer transferring money through the Internet. It is faster than going to the bank and filling the forms. Transferring money in traditional way takes about a day, but using Internet you can do this in few seconds even on Saturday and Sunday. What’s more internet banks give you insurance against unauthorized transaction. Some people think that their money can be stolen by hackers easily. It isn’t true because the easiest way to steal your money from internet bank is breaking to your house and stealing your bank codes. Internet banks have very good protections witch make them practically unbreakable. Next advantage of internet is email. Internet emails get in a few seconds in their destinations. It is very important when you want to send something to somewhere far from your place, for example Australia. Of course you can send whatever you want, not only texts such as movies, photos, songs, computer programs and so on. And sending an email is much cheaper than phoning, or sending normal letters. Beside a lot of advantages, Internet also has some disadvantages too. First of disadvantages is that people who spend too much time sitting in the front of computer can easily get ill. Radiation emitted by computer’s screen is harmful to eyes. People who spend too much time at their homes (because they do not need to go anywhere, they can do everything by using Internet) are getting weaker. Sitting for a long time is also harmful to the spine. The second disadvantage is that Internet can by addictive. Some people just can’t live without it. They have no real friends and when Internet is down they are getting furious. Internet has some opponents but more and more people treats Internet like telephone, or radio. They use it for fun and work. In my opinion, at present living without internet would be quite difficult.
Nowadays most
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people
in the world have had a contact with computers. A majority of them has been using international computer's network known as the Internet -the mass media you
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On my view, using internet has more advantages than disadvantages.
Firstly
, the Internet provides access to
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a lot of
information.
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Some
of them are
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very
useful in your job other
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helps
in your hobby. Searching with Google, you can find everything you
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want
. You can
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go shopping".
do shopping
through the Internet.
Of course
, it has no sense to buying a roll,
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but
if you need something inaccessible, you will be able to
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buy
it in Internet shop. You
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just
need
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only
to select what you
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want
, fill in
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some
forms and click ok. In a few days, you will
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get
what you have ordered to your home
directly
, without going anywhere.

You
also
can pay with your credit card, pay postman when you
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get
the package, or transfer
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money
from your
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bank
account.
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Today
, almost bigger
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bank
offer transferring
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money
through the Internet. It is faster than going to the
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bank
and filling the forms. Transferring
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money
in traditional way takes about a day,
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but
using Internet you can do this in few seconds even on Saturday and Sunday.

What’s more internet
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banks
give you insurance against unauthorized transaction.
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Some
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people
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think
that their
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money
can
be stolen
by hackers
easily
. It isn’t true
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because
the easiest way to steal your
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money
from internet
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bank
is breaking to your
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house
and stealing your
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bank
codes. Internet
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banks
have
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very
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good
protections witch
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make
them
practically
unbreakable.

Next
advantage of internet is email. Internet emails
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get
in a few seconds in their destinations. It is
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very
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important
when you
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want
to
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send
something to somewhere far from your place,
for example
Australia. Of
The comma is probably missing here: "course, you".
course you
can
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send
whatever you
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want
, not
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only
texts such as movies, photos, songs, computer programs and
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so
on. And sending an email is much cheaper than phoning, or sending normal letters.

Beside
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a lot of
advantages, Internet
also
has
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some
disadvantages too.
First
of disadvantages is that
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people
who spend too much time sitting in the front of computer can
easily
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get
ill. Radiation emitted by computer’s screen is harmful to eyes.
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People
who spend too much time at their homes (
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because
they do not need to go anywhere, they can do everything by using Internet) are getting weaker. Sitting for a long time is
also
harmful to the spine. The second
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disadvantage
is that Internet can
Did you maybe mean "buy" or "be"?
by
addictive.
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Some
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people
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just
can’t
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live
without it. They have no real friends and when Internet is down they are getting furious.

Internet has
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some
opponents
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but
more and more
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people
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treats
Internet like telephone, or radio. They
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use
it for fun and work. In my opinion, at present living without internet would be quite difficult.
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IELTS essay talk about one form of mass media that you use everyday and explain how you benefit from using it

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
479 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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