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There have been some problems with the bus service especially its reliability in your area over the last two weeks Write a letter to the manager of the bus company In your letter describe what the problems are explain how these problems are affecting you v.1

There have been some problems with the bus service especially its reliability in your area over the last two weeks Write a letter to the manager of the bus company In your letter describe what the problems are explain how these problems are affecting you v. 1
In modern era technology forms a significant part in many fields. Some people are of the opinion that learning through technology at schools and higher educational settings can be more efficient, while many others suggest that absorbing knowledge with the help of teachers is the best method. In my opinion, technology-based learning has several advantages related to time management, however traditional way is more beneficial to overall progress of students. We are surrounded by technology and its products in just about every aspect of our lives. Machines are more useful in terms of provision of flexibility. Replacing humans in favour of technological devices in teaching and education might result in faster learning. In other words, students have a chance of determining how to use their time effectively. Moreover, this mode of education provides for a liberal environment in which students are free to manage when to study through online courses and explanatory videos. Furthermore, they can determine which subjects they will focus on and repeat issues which they have found hard and complicated. On the other hand, academics play a vital role in educating the youngsters. Face-to-face teaching encourages an interactive environment in which students can ask questions immediately when they do not understand or have doubts. Therefore, they can take in all information given without having any complexities in their minds. This cultivates in a complete understanding. Take, for example during coronavirus outbreak learners have continued their training with remote courses and most of them said they acknowledged the worth of in class learning because students have suffered from the difficulty of the lessons without an academician. In conclusion, despite computers are useful and giving flexible time management to the school-goings, teachers are better at preparing new generations for the future by presenting an active atmosphere in the classroom. I believe that, teaching team play a crucial part in educational system and they should not be replaced with unsufficient technological machines.
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fields.
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people
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learning
through technology at schools and higher educational settings can be more efficient, while
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many
others suggest that absorbing knowledge with the
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help
of teachers is the best method. In my opinion, technology-based
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learning
has several advantages related to time management,
however
traditional way is more beneficial to
overall
progress of students.

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are surrounded
by technology and its products in
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just
about every aspect of our
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lives
. Machines are more useful in terms of provision of flexibility. Replacing humans in
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favour
of technological devices in teaching and education might result in faster
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learning
.
In other words
,
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students
have a chance of determining how to
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use
their time
effectively
.
Moreover
, this mode of education provides for a liberal environment in which
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students
are free to manage when to study through online courses and explanatory videos.
Furthermore
, they can determine which subjects they will focus on and repeat issues which they have found
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hard
and complicated.

On the other hand
, academics play a vital role in educating the youngsters. Face-to-face teaching encourages an interactive environment in which
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students
can ask questions immediately when they do not understand or have doubts.
Therefore
, they can take in all information
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given
without having any complexities in their minds. This cultivates in a complete understanding. Take,
for example
during coronavirus outbreak learners have continued their training with remote courses and most of them said they acknowledged the worth of in
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class
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learning
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have suffered from the difficulty of the lessons without an academician.

In conclusion
, despite computers are useful and giving flexible time management to the school-goings, teachers are better at preparing new generations for the future by presenting an active atmosphere in the classroom. I believe that, teaching team play a crucial part in educational
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system and
they should not
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technological machines.
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IELTS essay There have been some problems with the bus service especially its reliability in your area over the last two weeks Write a letter to the manager of the bus company In your letter describe what the problems are explain how these problems are affecting you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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