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There has been increasing facilites for shopping online with the boom of innovation in technology.However few argue that it has made shoping more convenient while some object it.This essay will discuss why it is important to have buying experience offline and online .

There has been increasing facilites for shopping online with the boom of innovation in technology. However few argue that it has made shoping more convenient while some object it. This essay will discuss why it is important to have buying experience offline and online. VBNY3
There has been increasing facilites for shopping online with the boom of innovation in technology. However few argue that it has made shoping more convenient while some object it. This essay will discuss why it is important to have buying experience offline and online. First of all, with the surge of ubanisation and improverished in living index of today's generations. There is also hasslee free shopping done from comfort of your home. Which has save a lots of time and energy particularly people in metro cities as many don't get time from their work to do so. Morevoer, it provide range of choice in different categories of shopping, that can done in anywhere at anytime. Above all, it do not have pressure of purchasing from salesman and manipulating your mind for higer and expensive brand. For instance, last time I went to buy a pair of boot for my mother at estimated cost around rupees around 4000 from Adidas, but I ended up in buying 6000 budget shoes due to their strategies for offering perk along forceful convinced to buy it. On contrary part, buying experince is critical to apprend the value and quality of stuff before enjoying shopping online. Although it reduces time, but it might lose trust in purchasing online especially clothes and snack. My friend ordered shampoo from Flipkart. It came out to be expired date. Thereafter, nobody came to pick up and neither response despite leaving several messages and calling. Even refund took ages to proces. It acts as therapy for some people. At same time, it is an exercise for health and refreshment to meet up with friends and relatives. Finally, I think that one should do both as it has it's own an added benefits. Yet it mainly depend upon your situation.
There has been increasing
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facilites
for
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shopping
online with the boom of innovation in technology.
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However
few argue that it has made
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shoping
more convenient while
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some
object it. This essay will discuss why it is
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important
to have buying experience offline and online.

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First of all
, with the surge of
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ubanisation
and
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improverished
in living index of
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today
's generations. There is
also
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hasslee
free
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shopping
done from comfort of your home. Which has
Use past participle here: "saved".
save
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a lots
of
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time
and energy
particularly
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people
in metro cities as
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many
don't
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get
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time
from their work to do
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so
.
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Morevoer
, it
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provide
range of choice in
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different
categories of
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shopping
, that can done in anywhere at anytime.
Above all
, it
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do
not have pressure of purchasing from salesman and manipulating your mind for
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higer
and expensive brand.
For instance
, last
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time
I went to
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buy
a
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pair of boot
for my mother at estimated cost around rupees around 4000 from Adidas,
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but
I ended up in buying 6000 budget shoes due to their strategies for offering perk along forceful convinced to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
it.

On contrary part, buying
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experince
is critical to
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apprend
the value and quality of stuff
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before
enjoying
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shopping
online. Although it
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reduces
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time
,
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but
it might lose trust in purchasing online
especially
clothes and snack. My friend ordered shampoo from Flipkart. It came out to
be expired
date. Thereafter, nobody came to pick up and neither response despite leaving several messages and calling. Even refund took ages to
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proces
. It acts as therapy for
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. At same
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time
, it is an exercise for health and refreshment to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
up with friends and relatives.

Finally
, I
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think
that one should do both as it has
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it's
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own
an
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added
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benefits
.
Yet
it
mainly
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depend
upon your situation.
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IELTS essay There has been increasing facilites for shopping online with the boom of innovation in technology. However few argue that it has made shoping more convenient while some object it. This essay will discuss why it is important to have buying experience offline and online.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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