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The world's most urgent problm is caused by over population. Do you agree or disagree?

It is indeed true that, Population is increasing day by day. To curtail the hardship of over population people and ministry should adopt some parameters by providing free knowledge about birth rate and their future. I am in the agreement of this statement. There are innumerable reasons in the favor of the arguement. Firstly, people are facing financial restrictions even though educated people are also not getting job according to their professions with the expand in birth rate. As a result, people are going through financial crices which leading their future downward. For instance, people who have two or three children they are facing more problems than who have one kid. Consequently, people from poor to middle families can only afford the study of one children in their house. Moving further, As population is growing natural resources are also decreasing. For example, if their are five members in family they are using coal and petrol for their daily life, think if the population is increased how much resources people need daily. As a result, it is hard for following generation to survive in this world. Moreover, people are getting less space to live and people who have big families they are facing multifarious difficulties to live in small space. Also, pollution is also developing swiftly. As a result it also causing plethora of problems for people such as loud noise and air pollution thus people are also coming in the contact of diseases such as austhma due to bad air quality. In conclusion, I opine that swelling population is harmful for earth. Therefore, it is the responsibility of authority to make laws such as one child in every home and government also introduce and give knowledge to people about new laws.
It is
indeed
true that,
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Population
is increasing day by day. To curtail the hardship of over
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population
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people
and ministry should adopt
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some
parameters by providing free knowledge about birth rate and their future. I am in the agreement of this statement. There are innumerable reasons in the favor of the
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arguement
.
Firstly
,
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people
are facing financial restrictions
even though
educated
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people
are
also
not getting job according to their professions with
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the expand
in birth rate.
As a result
,
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people
are going through financial
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crices
which leading their future downward.
For instance
,
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people
who have two or three children they are facing more problems than who have one kid.
Consequently
,
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people
from poor to middle families can
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only
afford the study of
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one children
in their
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house
. Moving
further
, As
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population
is growing natural resources are
also
decreasing.
For example
, if
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their
are five members in family they are using coal and petrol for their daily life,
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think
if the
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population
is increased
how
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much
resources
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people
need daily.
As a result
, it is
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hard
for following generation to survive in this world.
Moreover
,
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people
are getting less space to
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live
and
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people
who have
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big
families they are facing multifarious difficulties to
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live
in
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small
space.
Also
, pollution is
also
developing
swiftly
.
As a result
it
also
causing plethora of problems for
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people
such as loud noise and air pollution
thus
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people
are
also
coming in the contact of diseases such as
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austhma
due to
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bad
air quality.
In conclusion
, I opine that swelling
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population
is harmful for earth.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of authority to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
laws such as one child in every home and
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government
also
introduce and give knowledge to
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people
about new laws.

IELTS essay The world's most urgent problm is caused by over population.

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