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the worlds most urgent problem is caused by overpopulation. Do you agree or disagree?

the worlds most urgent problem is caused by overpopulation. 5Oee
Population, that which is increasing rapidly, it is the most threatening issue the world faces today. Many countries oc the world are currently experiencing problems caused by growing population in urban areas. I firmly agree with the statement, my arguments are justified in the ensuing paragraphs. There are innumerous reasons to support my arguments. The most common valid argument for my opinion, due to overpopulation in any country; they are face two major problems such as unemployment and poverty. This is because, people do not get better opportunities of jobs. Consequently, it will lead to poverty becuse of this, many people commits crime. Who is uneducated. For example, according to research, in India, due to over crowding in the year of 2019 then their unemployment and crime level increased upto 10%. Furthermore, increase pollution on the earth or in environment. This is because, people requires home or shelter to live and they are cutting down trees for their illegal houses. In addition, more human kind is equal to morr waste and it is impact on our environment. This is to say, citizens are use motor bikr and car for transportation and vehicle emits carbon dioxide in air. So air pollution is increase and uneducated porplr is dump their home easte at land or in water, so water pollution are also upsurge. For instance, according to date of world health organization due to overpopulation, contamination is increase 10% per year. On the contrary, few antagonist perceive that increase population is save our culture and traditions. To support, it can explained that when more population. then they will save our culture by follow their customs and traditions, such as not only food, clothes but alos habit. Apart form this, they also believe that more communities is make us one family and it makes strong bond with eachother. To conclude the discussion, it can be finally commented that, due to overpopulation there are more problems happens around the world like unemployment and environment. It is not logical for any countries or nations.
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countries
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the
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are
currently
experiencing problems caused by growing
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population
in urban areas. I
firmly
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agree
with the statement, my arguments
are justified
in the ensuing paragraphs.

There are
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innumerous
reasons to support my arguments. The most common valid argument for my opinion,
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due
to overpopulation in any country; they are face two major problems such as unemployment and poverty. This is
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because
,
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people
do not
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get
better opportunities of jobs.
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, it will lead to poverty
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becuse
of this,
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many
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people
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commits
crime. Who
is uneducated
.
For example
, according to research, in India,
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due
to over crowding in the year of 2019 then their unemployment and crime level increased
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upto
10%.

Furthermore
,
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pollution on the earth or in environment. This is
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because
,
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people
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requires
home or shelter to
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live and
they are cutting down trees for their illegal
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houses
.
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, more human kind is equal to
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morr
waste and it is impact on our environment. This is to say, citizens are
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use
motor
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bikr
and car for transportation and vehicle emits carbon dioxide in air.
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So
air pollution is
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increase
and uneducated
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porplr
is dump their home
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easte at
land or in water,
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so
water pollution are
also
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upsurge
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For instance
, according to date of
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world health organization
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due
to overpopulation, contamination is
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increase
10% per year.

On the contrary
,
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perceive that
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increase
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population
is
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save
our culture and traditions. To support, it can
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explained
that when more
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population
.
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then
they will save our culture by follow their customs and traditions, such as not
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only
food, clothes
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but
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alos
habit.
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Apart form
this, they
also
believe that more communities is
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make
us one family and it
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makes
strong bond with
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eachother
.

To conclude
the discussion, it can be
finally
commented that,
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due
to overpopulation there are more problems happens around the
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world
like unemployment and environment. It is not logical for any countries or nations.
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IELTS essay the worlds most urgent problem is caused by overpopulation.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
339 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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