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The world of work rapidly changes and employees cannot depend on the same job and working conditions for life. Give causes for rapid changes and suggest some ways for people to prepare for their future.

The world of work rapidly changes and employees cannot depend on the same job and working conditions for life. Give causes for rapid changes and suggest some ways for people to prepare for their future. 56apN
It is true that nowadays workers are no longer dependent on the same work environment for a long time due to changes in the job market. This essay will analyse some possible causes and I believe that several measures can be taken into account to address this problem. There are two principal reasons why the job market has changed remarkably in recent years. It has become more and more competitive due to the population explosion, which has forced many employees to change their workplaces. Take Vietnam as a prime example, various workers have flocked to the countryside or small towns in search of job opportunities for their living because it is very difficult for them to live in Hanoi and other densely populated cities. Moreover, governments have been investing a huge amount of money in education systems, leading to more well-educated workforces. Hence, people have to apply themselves to develop practical skills unless it is impossible for them to maintain their job and compete with younger candidates. Despite those changes mentioned above, I still believe that people can take some methods to have a good preparation for their future. An effective solution is for governments to change policies in which citizens have to control their childbirth and encourage the expansion of more companies and factories through taxes. Hence, people will have more chances to seek for a job, which helps them earn enough money to raise their family and meet different needs in their life. Another possible method is that various exchange programs between companies need to be held around the world, therefore workers have opportunities to become more versatile by learning important skills from others to meet all requirements. In conclusion, reasons related to the population and education lead to some changes in the world of work. However, governments and companies can take immediate steps to help workers prepare carefully for their future career.
It is true that nowadays
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workers
are no longer dependent on the same work environment

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for
a long time due to
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changes
in the
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job
market. This essay will
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analyse
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some
possible causes and I believe that several measures can
be taken
into account to address this problem.

There are two principal reasons why the
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job
market has
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changed
remarkably
in recent

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years
. It has become more and more competitive due to the population explosion, which has forced
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many
employees to
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change
their workplaces. Take Vietnam as a prime example, various
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workers
have flocked to the countryside or
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small
towns in search of
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job
opportunities for their living
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because
it is
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very
difficult for them to
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live
in Hanoi and other
densely
populated cities.
Moreover
,
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governments
have been investing a huge amount of money in education systems, leading to more well-educated
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workforces
.
Hence
,
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people
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have to
apply themselves to develop practical
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skills
unless it is impossible for them to maintain their
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job
and compete with younger candidates.

Despite those
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changes
mentioned above, I
still
believe that
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people
can take
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some
methods

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to
have a
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good
preparation for their future. An effective solution is for
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governments
to
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change
policies in which citizens
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have to
control their childbirth and encourage the expansion of more
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companies
and factories through taxes.
Hence
,
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people
will have more chances to seek for a
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job
, which
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helps
them earn
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enough
money to raise their family and
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meet
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different
needs in their life. Another possible method is that various exchange programs between
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companies
need to
be held
around the world,
therefore
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workers
have opportunities to become more versatile by learning
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important
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skills
from others to
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meet
all requirements.

In conclusion
, reasons related to the population and education lead to
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some
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changes
in the

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world
of work.
However
,
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governments
and
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companies
can take immediate steps to
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help
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workers
prepare
carefully
for their future career.
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IELTS essay The world of work rapidly changes and employees cannot depend on the same job and working conditions for life. Give causes for rapid changes and suggest some ways for people to prepare for their future.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
315 words
5.5
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