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Old generation often hold some traditional ideas. However this is not helpful for younger generation.

Old generation often hold some traditional ideas. However this is not helpful for younger generation. jRVNy
In contemporary era, There is intense argument over the issue that Traditional concepts are normally held by older generations but at the same time these are not benificial for the youth. A certain demographics of society favours it, however rest averse it. This essay disagrees that traditional perception are not crutial for juvenile. Firstly this essay will discuss that it spreads awareness about the individuals cultural background. Secondly, discuss that it teaches survival skills to the youth. One approach is that traditinal believes spreads awareness among the youngsters about there cultural background. Moreover It teaches the individuals about the rich history of there ancestors. Since the individuals will know more about there historical background they can pass on this crutial information to the next upcoming generation. To cite an example a recent MIT research revealed that the young individuals knew almost everything about there traditions just because they were in contant touch with the people of older generation. Another point to consider is that these traditional beliefs of the older generation taught some significant survival skills to the youngsters. These skills will not only help them to enhance there presnality but will also play a important role in teaching them some life saving skills. For instance, Nelson survey conducted in 2018 revealed that 80% of the youth in a society knew there traditional survival skills as they followed the guide lines of the people of older generation. All the above discussed assertions lead to conclution that traditional concepts held by older generation are crutial for youngsters as it spreads awareness about there historical background also it provides knowledge about survival skills.
In contemporary era, There is intense argument over the issue that
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Traditional
concepts are
normally
held by
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older
generations
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but
at the same time these are not
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benificial
for the youth.

A certain
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demographics
of society
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favours
it,
however
rest averse it. This essay disagrees that
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traditional
perception are not
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crutial
for juvenile.
Firstly
this essay will discuss that it spreads awareness about the
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individuals
cultural
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background
.
Secondly
, discuss that it teaches
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survival
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skills
to the youth.

One approach is that
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traditinal
believes spreads awareness among the youngsters about there cultural
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background
.
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Moreover
It teaches the
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individuals
about the rich history of
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there
ancestors.
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Since
the
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individuals
will know more about there historical
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background
they can pass on this
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crutial
information to the
next
upcoming generation. To cite an example a recent MIT research revealed that the young
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individuals
knew almost everything about there traditions
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they were in
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contant
touch with the
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people
of
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older
generation.

Another point to consider is that these
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traditional
beliefs of the
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older
generation taught
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some
significant
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survival
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skills
to the youngsters. These
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skills
will not
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help
them to enhance there
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presnality
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important
role in teaching them
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some
life saving
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skills
.

For instance
, Nelson survey conducted in 2018 revealed that 80% of the youth in a society knew there
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traditional
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survival
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skills
as they followed the guide lines of the
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people
of
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older
generation.

All the above discussed assertions lead to
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conclution
that
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traditional
concepts held by
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older
generation are
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crutial
for youngsters as it spreads awareness about there historical
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background
also
it provides knowledge about
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survival
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skills
.
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IELTS essay Old generation often hold some traditional ideas. However this is not helpful for younger generation.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
271 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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