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The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same work or the same work conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare for people to work in the future. v.3

The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same work or the same work conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare for people to work in the future. v. 3
As the nature of businesses evolves at an ever-increasing pace, many jobs have gradually become obsolete, and workers are no longer guaranteed any lifetime or sustainable employment career. The main reasons behind this shift in the paradigm are globalization and technology growth. To overcome this challenge, people need to upgrade their skills and have a change mindset. Increasing globalization and technological developments have disrupted many traditional industries leading to the loss of many jobs. When companies operate more internationally, their workforce will likely optimize for cost efficiencies. Specific jobs, such as call centers or manufacturing, are outsourced to developing countries such as India or China and no longer available in developed countries. Other work, especially tenacious and repetitive ones such as bank tellers or accountants, are being replaced by artificial intelligence. In the not so distant future, machines will be able to do even more complex tasks like drawing or driving. No job is safe. Knowing that these changes in the world of work are inevitable, employees should actively increase their competitiveness, avoid any complacency, and be willing to take on more risks. Learning multiple languages is an excellent way to start any career change as it instantly doubles or triples your work market. Other trending skills such as I. T and social marketing, will also allow one to be highly regarded in the eyes of head hunters. But more importantly, people should not be afraid to make different career moves and always be mentally ready for new opportunities. In conclusion, most work will be replaced by either cheaper third-world labour or advanced machinery. The best way to adapt to this new world is always to stay ahead of the learning curve and be open to any change.
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jobs
have
gradually
become obsolete, and workers are no longer guaranteed any lifetime or sustainable employment career. The main reasons behind this shift in the paradigm are globalization and technology growth. To overcome this challenge,
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people
need to upgrade their
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skills
and have a
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change
mindset.

Increasing globalization and technological developments have disrupted
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many
traditional industries leading to the loss of
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many
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jobs
. When
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companies
operate more
internationally
, their workforce will likely optimize for cost efficiencies. Specific
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jobs
, such as call centers or manufacturing,
are outsourced
to
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developing countries
such as India or China and no longer available in
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developed countries
. Other
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work
,
especially
tenacious and repetitive ones such as bank tellers or accountants, are
being replaced
by artificial intelligence. In the not
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so
distant future, machines will be able to do even more complex tasks like drawing or driving. No
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job
is safe.

Knowing that these
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changes
in the world of
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work
are inevitable, employees should
actively
increase their competitiveness, avoid any complacency, and be willing to take on more
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risks
. Learning multiple languages is an excellent way to
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start
any career
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change
as it
instantly
doubles or triples your
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work
market. Other trending
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skills
such as I. T and social marketing, will
also
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allow
one to be
highly
regarded in the eyes of head hunters.
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But
more
importantly
,
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people
should not be afraid to
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make
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different
career
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moves
and always be mentally ready for new opportunities.

In conclusion
, most
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work
will
be replaced
by either cheaper third-world
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labour
or advanced machinery. The best way to adapt to this new world is always to stay ahead of the learning curve and be open to any
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change
.
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IELTS essay The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same work or the same work conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare for people to work in the future. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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