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The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more?

The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more? GMMmo
In this contemporary era due to advancement of technology, modernization and globalization human have prospered in every field but every coin have two sides, as nowadays aeroplane are more running for several purposes like for travelling, business and commercial reasons across the globe in today's timeline. I would like to discuss pros and cons in upcoming paragraph. To begin with, there are numerous merits of using airlines. Firstly, in leisure time people use flights to travel othe places thus, they can gain more knowledge by exploring new places and know more about others culture, norms, rules and many more. Secondly, planes use for business is good for other country citizen as they can get more job opportunity and business can run fast with much profits. To illustrate, food company like dominos which is available in 85 countries including India but it is originally based in USA. Finally, if air transport is use for commercial base is well for two nations because by import and export of product it create strong bond between two countries as well as flights are more convenient compare to other vehicles and consume less time than ship to travel. In contrary side, with the benefits of flights there are some negative side as well, like planes use more fuel then other transportation system which emit harmful gases and deplete ozone layer along with it increase in greenhouse gases and rise in temperature on earth also decrease in fossil fuel as time spend. Lastly, air transport create more noise and it is adverse effects on human who are living around the airport and suffer from air and noise pollution. In conclusion, it is inferred that, more tax should not be implement on flights because demerits are less than merits; however, it pollute environment but it bring many advantage to people and nations such as economics, tourism and culture.
In this contemporary era due to advancement of technology, modernization and globalization human have prospered in every field
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every coin have two sides, as nowadays
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aeroplane
are more running for several purposes like for travelling, business and commercial reasons across the globe in
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today
's timeline. I would like to discuss pros and cons in upcoming paragraph.

To
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begin
with, there are numerous merits of using airlines.
Firstly
, in leisure time
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people
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use
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flights
to travel
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othe
places
thus
, they can gain more knowledge by exploring new places and know more about others culture, norms,
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rules
and
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more.
Secondly
,
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planes
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use
for business is
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good
for
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other
country citizen as they can
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get
more job opportunity and business can run
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fast
with
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much
profits. To illustrate, food
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company
like
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dominos
which is available in 85 countries including India
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but
it is
originally
based
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in USA
.
Finally
, if air transport is
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use
for commercial base is well for two nations
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because
by import and export of product it
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create
strong bond between two countries
as well
as
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flights
are more convenient compare to
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other
vehicles and consume less time than ship to travel.

In contrary side, with the benefits of
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flights
there are
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negative
side
as well
, like
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planes
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use
more fuel
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then
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other
transportation system which emit harmful gases and deplete ozone layer along with it increase in greenhouse gases and rise in temperature on earth
also
decrease in fossil fuel as time spend.
Lastly
, air transport create more noise and it is adverse effects on human who are living around the airport and suffer from air and noise pollution.

In conclusion
, it
is inferred
that, more tax should not be
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implement
on
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flights
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because
demerits are less than merits;
however
, it
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pollute
environment
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but
it
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bring
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many advantage
to
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people
and nations such as economics, tourism and culture.
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IELTS essay The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more?

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