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The way of becoming patient

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These days people are becoming impatient because they want to achieve their goals as soon as possible but, unfortunately it is not possible. therefore, they should be aware about benefit of being patient and find a way for become patient. If you want to know about profit of being patient, I will mention to some of them. Firstly, it makes you a strong person so, you can tolerate difficulties easily. Second, people equate your name with introverted and logical thus they will like you. For example, your family know you as a wise person because of your patience. Third, patience makes you think of your problems to make the best decision. There are many solutions to increase your patience. For example, just by a deep breath you will be able to control yourself. You can make your mind busy with enjoying the way of your life. I mean you should convert your big goals into small by this you can focus on small goals so, you will achieve them very soon and see the results of your work.
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they want to achieve their goals as
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, unfortunately it is not possible.
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, they should be aware about benefit of being patient and find a way for become patient. If you want to know about profit of being patient, I will mention to
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of them.
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you a strong person
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, you can tolerate difficulties
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. Second,
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people
equate your name with introverted and logical
thus
they will like you.
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, your family know you as a wise person
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of your patience. Third, patience
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you
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of your problems to
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the best decision. There are
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many
solutions to increase your patience.
For example
,
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just
by a deep breath you will be able to control yourself. You can
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make
your mind busy with enjoying the way of your life. I mean you should convert your
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big
goals into
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by this you can focus on
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goals
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, you will achieve them
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the results of your work.
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IELTS essay The way of becoming patient

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
178 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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