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the value of one country's exports in various product categories

the value of one country's exports in various product categories 5bVJp
The data given presents the value of a country's exports in different categories in 2015 and 2016. About 61 billion dollars worth of petroleum products were exported in 2015 whereas a 3% increase in exports is found in the subsequent year. Around 55 billion dollars of engineering goods were exported in 2015 meanwhile in the coming year there was an 8. 5% increase in the same. germs and jewelry is the only product category that lost 5. 18% of total earnings in 2016, compared to the 43 billion dollars in the prior year. Growth in percentage of 0. 81% and 15% can be observed in the agricultural and textile products in 2016. A net increment in export earnings can be established in 2016 as to 2015 from the information provided
The data
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presents the value of a country's exports in
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different
categories in 2015 and 2016. About 61 billion dollars worth of petroleum products
were exported
in 2015 whereas a 3% increase in exports
is found
in the subsequent year. Around 55 billion dollars of engineering
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goods
were exported
in 2015 meanwhile in the coming year there was an 8. 5% increase in the same.
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germs
and jewelry is the
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only
product category that lost 5. 18% of total earnings in 2016, compared to the 43 billion dollars in the prior year. Growth in percentage of 0. 81% and 15% can
be observed
in the agricultural and textile products in 2016. A net increment in export earnings can
be established
in 2016 as to 2015 from the information
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IELTS essay the value of one country's exports in various product categories

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