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Fast food advertisement should be banned in school and college. Do you agree or disagree?

Fast food advertisement should be banned in school and college. YyEEr
It is irrefutable that in this modern era the level of fast food has leaped which is really unimaginable. On the one hand, it is not only concern for the societies but also school and Colleges. In this paragraph i will elaborate my view upcoming paragraph that we should be banned fast food advertisement or not. However, most people in my country think everyday that we should banned advertisement of fast food so that we can't face any obstacles in future.
It is irrefutable that in this modern era the level of
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fast
food has leaped which is
really
unimaginable. On the one hand, it is not
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only
concern for the societies
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but
also
school and Colleges. In this paragraph
Did you mean "I"?
i
will elaborate my view upcoming paragraph that we should
be banned
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
food advertisement or not.
However
, most
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people
in my country
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think
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
that we should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "ban"
banned
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
food
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so
that we can't face any obstacles
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.

IELTS essay Fast food advertisement should be banned in school and college.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
81 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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