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The use of social media is replacing face to face contact with many people

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In our rapidly changing world, the introduction and development of social networking have always been the hottest issue that directly affects our daily lives. Whether these online applications such as Facebook, Instagram, Skype, etc. may substitute for face-to-face communication, I believe that the benefits they bring may overshadow the drawbacks. First of all, it is undeniable that with the variety and availability of online platforms currently, an enormous number of people can access the internet easily for any purpose. People from all around the world can stay connected, update the latest information, and exchange information at any time and anywhere. For example, due to an outburst of COVID-19 recently, many people are expected to work from home via a technology device like a laptop. Consequently, social networking sites are so beneficial and help workers to complete the task without needing to. Moreover, despite a long-distance, parents can keep in touch with the children studying abroad thanks to technological innovation like a smartphone. At the same time, loving couples can nurture their love by calling and texting each other on Facebook, Skype in which distance plays a crucial part. On the other hand, as many upcoming online platforms are about to introduce, people tend to rely excessively on the virtual world. For instance, people are more likely to use a food delivery section on Grab to buy food instead of buying fresh groceries and cooking on their own. Hence, people are inclined to stay in their comfort zone rather than stepping out, socializing, and learning new skills. What is more dangerous is that people will be a lack of basic skills to survive, interact, and speak up under important circumstances like in a group discussion at school, at work meeting, a job interview, etc. In conclusion, social media can have a significant negative impact on society, however, I consider that their advantages would exceed the drawbacks.
In our
rapidly
changing world, the introduction and development of social networking have always been the hottest issue that
directly
affects our daily
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lives
. Whether these online applications such as Facebook, Instagram, Skype, etc. may substitute for face-to-face communication, I believe that the benefits they bring may overshadow the drawbacks.
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First of all
, it is undeniable that with the variety and availability of online platforms
currently
, an enormous number of
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people
can access the internet
easily
for any purpose.
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People
from all around the world can stay connected, update the latest information, and exchange information at any time and anywhere.
For example
, due to an outburst of COVID-19 recently,
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many
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people
are
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expected
to work from home via a technology device like a laptop.
Consequently
, social networking sites are
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so
beneficial and
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help
workers to complete the task without needing to.
Moreover
, despite a long-distance, parents can
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keep
in touch with the children studying abroad thanks to technological innovation like a smartphone. At the same time, loving couples can nurture their
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love
by calling and texting each other on Facebook, Skype in which distance plays a crucial part.

On the other hand
, as
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many
upcoming online platforms are about to introduce,
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people
tend to rely
excessively
on the virtual world.
For instance
,
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people
are more likely to
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use
a food delivery section on Grab to
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buy
food
instead
of buying fresh groceries and cooking on their
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own
.
Hence
,
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people
are inclined
to stay in their comfort zone
rather
than stepping out, socializing, and learning new
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skills
.
What is more
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dangerous
is that
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people
will be a lack of basic
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skills
to survive, interact, and speak up under
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important
circumstances like in a group discussion at school, at work meeting, a job interview, etc.

In conclusion
, social media can have a significant
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negative
impact on society,
however
, I consider that their advantages would exceed the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay The use of social media is replacing face to face contact with many people

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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