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1 Write an essay about one of the electronic devices

1 Write an essay about one of the electronic devices j85pw
Nowadays, life is more modern and comfortable so electronic devices play an important role in our life. Technological development and electronic devices have changed our lives a lot. One of the most indispensable electronic devices in each family is the television. Thanks to TV, people can get the latest information and enjoy interesting programs in an inexpensive and convenient way. Firstly, all of us need to get information, update news and everything happening around us every day. TV helps us to access easily with outside world. You just sit at home and choose information that you want to know. TV enables us to see things in distant places. It is indeed one of the most wonderful things that man has ever invented. Secondly, TV has a wide range of interesting programs. With many educational programs, children can learn more about anything or probably know about other cultures in different countries. It helps them to widen their knowledge. Game shows, comedies and music programs help people relax after a hard working day. When children are tired with studies, they can use the television to watch cartoons, film. It helps us to watch sports programs live from our home though they are happening in a very far country. In conclusion, for all these reasons, TV is one of the best electronic devices that is very necessary in every family and it will continue to be popular for a long
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electronic
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devices
play an
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important
role in our life. Technological development and
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electronic
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devices
have
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changed
our
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lives
a lot. One of the most indispensable
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electronic
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devices
in each family is the television. Thanks to TV,
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people
can
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get
the latest information and enjoy interesting
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programs
in an inexpensive and convenient way.

Firstly
, all of us need to
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get
information, update news and everything happening around us every day. TV
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helps
us to access
easily
with outside world. You
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just
sit at home and choose information that you want to know. TV enables us to
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see
things in distant places. It is
indeed
one of the most wonderful things that
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man
has ever invented.

Secondly
, TV has a wide range of interesting
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programs
. With
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many
educational
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programs
, children can learn more about anything or
probably
know about other cultures in
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different
countries. It
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helps
them to widen their knowledge. Game
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shows
, comedies and music
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help
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people
relax after a
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hard working
day. When children
are tired
with studies, they can
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use
the television to
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watch
cartoons, film. It
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helps
us to
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watch
sports
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programs
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live
from our home though they are happening in a
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very
far country.

In conclusion
, for all these reasons, TV is one of the best
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electronic
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devices
that is
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very
necessary in every family and it will continue to be popular for a long
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IELTS essay 1 Write an essay about one of the electronic devices

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
236 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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