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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

These days Physically Punishment in schools is discusstion case among people especially fathers, I will discuss this case in my article today and give my opinion in the end. Physically punishment with all its kind is disagreeable in physological communty and for other reason governments stop punishing in schools. First we have some physological harms, because of punish and especially agrassive punish on important organs in the body, that can cause a life-time harm for the student and it may put him in shock. Second we have teachers status, if the teacher are nervous for any reason that can reflex on students treating and can cause special stands that student gave punish more than he would have if the teacher was not nervous. Physically punishment can be a good thing that student can appreciate teachers for it, especially naughty students those show a good behaviour for the teachers who can use a method to punish them and the same students treat another teacher who can not punish them by a completly different way because they would be fine because they would not punish so they act bad behaviour and these thing I watch when I was study for example History teacher was a good and kind but if get angry, he act by a different way and may be aggrassive to student by other side we have a life-skills subject teacher was a kind person but he was foolish because that he's first year in education, ahe was trying to blend with student but all in vain. They use make fun of him. To sum up in my thought, I think Physical punishment need to be used by a last choice for the teacher but it must to be available and also need to not too agrassive just a small hurt enough.
These days
Physically
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Punishment
in schools is
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discusstion
case among
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people
especially
fathers, I will discuss this case in my article
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today
and give my opinion in the
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end
.

Physically
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punishment
with all its kind is disagreeable in
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physological
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communty
and for other reason
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governments
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stop
punishing in schools.
First
we have
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some
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physological
harms,
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because
of
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punish
and
especially
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agrassive
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punish
on
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important
organs in the body, that can cause a life-time harm for the
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student and
it may put him in shock. Second we have
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teachers
status, if the
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teacher
are nervous for any reason that can reflex on
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students
treating and can cause special stands that
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student
gave
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punish
more than he would have if the
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teacher
was not nervous.

Physically
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punishment
can be a
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good
thing that
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student
can appreciate
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teachers
for it,
especially
naughty
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students
those
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show
a
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good
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behaviour
for the
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teachers
who can
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use
a method to
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punish
them and the same
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students
treat another
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teacher
who can not
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punish
them by a
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completly
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different
way
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because
they would be fine
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because
they would not
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punish
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so
they act
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bad
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behaviour
and
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these thing
I
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watch
when I was study
for example
History
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teacher
was a
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good
and kind
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but
if
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get
angry, he
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act
by a
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different
way and may be
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aggrassive
to
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student
by other side we have a life-
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skills
subject
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teacher
was a kind person
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but
he was foolish
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because
that he's
first
year in education,
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ahe
was trying to blend with
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student
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but
all in vain. They
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use
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make
fun of him.

To sum up in my
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thought
, I
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think
Physical
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punishment
need to be
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used
by a last choice for the
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teacher
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but
it
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must to
be available and
also
need to not too
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agrassive
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just
a
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small
hurt
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enough
.
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IELTS essay The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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