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the use of corporal punishment in school is decline, yet is should be used to improve behaviour. what extant do agre

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In this contemporary era, hitting a student in school in front of the society is merely seen. It is believed by some people that use of corporal punishment is decreased, while others argue that it is necessary for infant and it could help to improve their behaviour. This essay will further elaborate on my views regard to those people who are in favor of corporal punishment is needed and thus will lead to a logical conclusion. To commence with, there are many reasons why I agree with those people who are of the view that physically hitting is beneficial. Firstly, school infrastructure was not develop in past time, so number of teachers are less. Moreover, if educator gives corporal punishment some student for their misbehave in the class, rest of the student's behaviour is well-menner. Secondly, if the pedagogue hitting for their mistake, they never do this mistake same again. Furthermore, educator's punishment is valuable in student life because they improve our mistakes and behaviour and physical. Thirdly, the pedagogue is only hitting or scolding those students who are obey their rule & regulation and respect their educators. For example, according to a report published in 'The Hindu' says, around 78% of student behave well and obey all the rules and regulations because they completed their elementary school where teacher was very strict. On the other hand, schools are modernized in this era. Firstly, morden school contains high-quality video camera if any students misbehave in the class, they give only warning because some parents are not accepting to corporal punishment. Secondly, if the pedagogue will hitting any students, they will surfuring in many problems because the local government imposed the rule about to ban corporal punishment. Moreover, in this era, punishing or physically hitting any students by their tachers is a bed things in the society. In conclusion, although, punishing a student is not good for their parent's thinking, i opine that corporal punishment is beneficial for the students and it's improve their behaviour.
In this contemporary era, hitting a
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student
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school
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seen
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some
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people
that
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use
of corporal
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punishment
is decreased
, while others argue that it is necessary for infant and it could
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help
to
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improve
their
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behaviour
. This essay will
further
elaborate on my views regard to those
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people
who are in favor of corporal
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punishment
is needed
and
thus
will lead to a logical conclusion.

To commence with, there are
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many
reasons why I
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agree
with those
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people
who are of the view that
physically
hitting is beneficial.
Firstly
,
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school
infrastructure was not
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develop
in
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past time
,
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so
number of teachers are less.
Moreover
, if educator gives corporal
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punishment
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some
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student
for their misbehave in the
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class
, rest of the student's
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behaviour
is
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well-menner
.
Secondly
, if the pedagogue hitting for their mistake, they never do this mistake same again.
Furthermore
, educator's
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punishment
is valuable in
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student
life
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because
they
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improve
our mistakes and
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behaviour
and physical.
Thirdly
, the pedagogue is
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only
hitting or scolding those
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students
who are
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obey
their
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rule
& regulation and respect their educators.
For example
, according to a report published in 'The Hindu' says, around 78% of
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student
behave well and obey all the
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rules
and regulations
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because
they completed their elementary
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school
where teacher was
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very
strict.

On the other hand
,
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schools
are modernized
in this era.
Firstly
,
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morden
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school
contains high-quality video camera if any
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students
misbehave in the
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class
, they give
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only
warning
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because
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some
parents are not accepting to corporal
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punishment
.
Secondly
, if the pedagogue will
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hitting
any
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students
, they will
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surfuring
in
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many
problems
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because
the local
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government
imposed the
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rule
about to ban corporal
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punishment
.
Moreover
, in this era, punishing or
physically
hitting any
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students
by their
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tachers
is a bed things in the society.

In conclusion
, although, punishing a
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student
is not
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good
for their parent's thinking,
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i
opine that corporal
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punishment
is beneficial for the
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students
and it's
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improve
their
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behaviour
.
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IELTS essay the use of corporal punishment in school is decline, yet is should be used to improve behaviour. what extant do agre

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