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The two maps show the radical changes that Happy Valley Shopping Center underwent during the period between 1982 and 2012.

The two maps show the radical changes that Happy Valley Shopping Center underwent during the period between 1982 and 2012. Dwm0j
The given map illustrate the changes happened in Happy Valley shopping center over the period of 30 years. Overall, it can be seen from the provided pictures that during the given period several changes can be observed. Shopping center has been modernised and improved. It is clearly observed that in 1982, around the shopping center have so many trees and the was a lake however in 2012 the trees were flattened and the furniture retail was built on the site of the lake. The parking lot was introduced in front of the shop. There have also many changes inside the building. Firstly, the entrance was redeveloped. Secondly, the coffee shop was removed.
The
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given
map illustrate the
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changes
happened in Happy Valley shopping center over the period of 30 years.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
from the provided pictures that during the
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given
period several
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changes
can
be observed
. Shopping center has been
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modernised
and
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improved
. It is
clearly
observed that in 1982, around the shopping center have
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so
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many
trees and
Please check whether a word is missing between 'the' and 'was' or whether 'the' is the correct determiner.
the
was a lake
however
in 2012 the trees
were flattened
and the furniture retail
was built
on the site of the lake. The parking lot
was introduced
in front of the shop. There have
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
inside the building.
Firstly
, the entrance
was redeveloped
.
Secondly
, the coffee shop
was removed
.
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IELTS essay The two maps show the radical changes that Happy Valley Shopping Center underwent during the period between 1982 and 2012.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
112 words
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