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The two figure below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of diferent age

The two figure below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of diferent age 6KE8B
These two figures below indicate the proportion of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the Uk and rate of male and female prisoners in the British prison system Overall, In Uk, there has a massive rate of male who commit crime and a minor rate of female In details of the first figure, it is clearly that the rate of conviction male outweigh that of female, at about 96% of men and 4% of women. In second figure, there was a similar among the raise, the highest and the decrease in the rate of age of offender. The proportion of offender at the age of ten to fifteen tends to increase significantly and reach the highest rate at the age of 20 in both male and female percentage of conviction, 16% at male and 5% at female. In contrast, the rate of both genre decrease heavily at the age of 20 to 60, from 5% to 0% at women and from 16% to 2% at men. The rate of male deliquincy at the age of 40 to 45 and that of female at the age of 45 to 55 stay unchanged
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IELTS essay The two figure below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of diferent age

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