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many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it is bad for them. why ? what are the effective ways to improve peole's eating habits.

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In the twenty-first century, people have a tendency to eat unhealthy food even though they understand it is detrimental. This is a popular situation that seriously threatens people's health in the future. Thus, this essay will look at the problem before exploring some solutions. In modern times, fast foods are prioritized even for having many harmful substances because of their usefulness. Indeed, there are numerous street foods being sold at inexpensive prices that attract people, especially children and students. In particular, people who work in offices habitually choose these due to the working feature. The packed schedule leads to the lack of time so fast foods are the best choice for them. In addition, recently, people eat unhealthy food due to following trends. In society, cultures of food have integrated that spark up the curiosity of young people. As a result, fast food stores and street vendors are prevalent, even becoming the main meal. It is necessary that the media should intervene and contribute to improving this matter. Organizing some campaigns about the negative effects of unhealthy food makes people more understand and change their bad habits. Besides, the media need to circulate diseases that people can have while maintaining these eating habits. It is undeniable that business plays a crucial role in changing peoples’ habits. Instead of creating a number of profits, they should attend to the healths’ issue. The business needs to carefully select the composition of foods that they manufacture and give the warning to consumers. In conclusion, the food industry is getting developed, therefore, there must be the most specific solution to guarantee the citizens’ health.
In the twenty-
first
century,
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people
have a tendency to eat unhealthy
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food
even though
they understand it is detrimental. This is a popular situation that
seriously
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people
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some
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In modern times,
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fast
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foods
are prioritized
even for having
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many
harmful substances
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because
of their usefulness.
Indeed
, there are numerous street
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foods
being sold
at inexpensive prices that attract
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people
,
especially
children and students.
In particular
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people
who work in offices
habitually
choose these due to the working feature. The packed schedule leads to the lack of time
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fast
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foods
are the best choice for them.
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, recently,
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people
eat unhealthy
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food
due to following trends. In society, cultures of
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food
have integrated that spark up the curiosity of young
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people
.
As a result
,
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fast
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food
stores and street vendors are prevalent, even becoming the main meal.

It is necessary that the media should intervene and contribute to improving this matter. Organizing
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some
campaigns about the
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negative
effects of unhealthy
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food
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makes
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people
more understand and
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change
their
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bad
habits.
Besides
, the media need to circulate diseases that
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people
can have while maintaining these eating habits. It is undeniable that business plays a crucial role in changing
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peoples’
habits.
Instead
of creating a number of profits, they should attend to the
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healths
’ issue. The business needs to
carefully
select the composition of
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foods
that they manufacture and give the warning to consumers.

In conclusion
, the
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food
industry is getting developed,
therefore
, there
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must
be the most specific solution to guarantee the citizens’ health.
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IELTS essay many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it is bad for them. why? what are the effective ways to improve peole's eating habits.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
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