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The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. what are the reasons? What are the impacts? v.4

The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. what are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 4
The customs like families getting together for meals has started to decline in the modern society. It has impacted healthy food cycles and family integration over the years. There are few apparent reasons, why nuclear families no longer share mealtimes as they did in the past. Finally, children are often too impatient to eat at the table and parents allow them to have their meals in front of the TV or computer. Secondly the close-knit family warmth is disappearing due to the economic pressure. In single- parent households or in families with working mothers, it is impossible to arrange regular meal times, When all the family members are together. The consequences for family life and children's health are serious from the prospective of the family meals taken together, are an important feature of a stable family background. This stability of the family routine is an essential factor in shaping up children's personality during their formative years. Moreover, family mealtimes are good to give guidance, share news and planning. In terms of health, household feast is important to organize a healthier diet, based on wholesome home made food other than fast-foods, junk-foods and snacks eaten to avoid main meals. Health consequences such as obesity and hyperactivity often results when young and old members failed to eat a balanced diet, used to be provided at family eat's, specially cooked by the loving mother's love and care. In conclusion, the necessity of family together at mealtimes at least once a day is unavoidable. It is up to the members to overcome the negative aspects by prioritizing the well being of the immediate relatives.
The customs like
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families
getting together for
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meals
has
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started
to decline in the modern society. It has impacted healthy food cycles and
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family
integration over the years.

There are few apparent reasons, why nuclear
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families
no longer share mealtimes as they did in the past.
Finally
, children are
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often
too impatient to eat at the table and parents
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allow
them to have their
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meals
in front of the TV or computer.

Secondly
the close-knit
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family
warmth is disappearing due to the economic pressure. In single- parent households or in
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families
with working mothers, it is impossible to arrange regular
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meal
times, When all the
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family
members are together.

The consequences for
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family
life and children's health are serious from the prospective of the
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family
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meals
taken together, are an
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important
feature of a stable
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family
background. This stability of the
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family
routine is an essential factor in shaping up children's personality during their formative years.
Moreover
,
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family
mealtimes are
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good
to give guidance, share news and planning. In terms of health, household feast is
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important
to organize a healthier diet, based on wholesome home made food other than
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fast
-foods, junk-foods and snacks eaten to avoid main
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meals
. Health consequences such as obesity and hyperactivity
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often
results when young and
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old
members failed to eat a balanced diet,
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used
to
be provided
at
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family
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eat's
,
specially
cooked by the loving mother's
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love
and care.

In conclusion
, the necessity of
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family
together at mealtimes at least once a day is unavoidable. It is up to the members to overcome the
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negative
aspects by prioritizing the
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well being
of the immediate relatives.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. what are the reasons? What are the impacts? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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