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Houses are essential for people. Some argue that governments should offer free houses for people who can not afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with the statement. v.1

Houses are essential for people. Some argue that governments should offer free houses for people who can not afford to pay for it. v. 1
Houses are important to the people as they provide shelter, hence, a few people have argued that the law should provide free shelters for the citizens who can't afford to pay for it. I strongly agree that the government should, therefore, pay for the needy who are unable to afford a home. To begin, a house is very important to own because it provides shelter to the people. After a long day of work, people tend to return to their homes to sleep and do other things. Without having a roof over one's head, people may end up on the streets or under bridges. To illustrate, having a home brings comfortability and togetherness to people in the southern part of Nigeria and it has helped them work effectively. Furthermore, the government owes its citizens care and shelter. They are expected to take people off the streets in order to improve lives and standard of living and also, prevent crimes such as rape, robbery and killing. It is expected by the law to build houses where people who are indisposed can live. For example the governor of Oyo State in Nigeria has built 56 homes so far for the homeless and thus, the crime rate in the state has drastically reduced. In conclusion, it is important for the government to construct houses for the needy in order to improve their lives and standard of living and at the same time reducing the crime rate such as rape, robbery and killing in the communities.
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have argued that the law should provide free
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it provides
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shelter
to the
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. After a long day of work,
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tend to return to their homes to sleep and do other things. Without having a roof over one's head,
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people
may
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up on the streets or under bridges. To illustrate, having a home brings
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comfortability
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in the southern part of Nigeria and it has
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, the
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government
owes its citizens care and
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. They are
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off the streets in order to
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lives
and standard of living and
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,
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prevent
crimes such as rape, robbery and killing. It is
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expected
by the law to build
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houses
where
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who
are indisposed
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live
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For example
the governor of
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Oyo
State in Nigeria has built 56 homes
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far for the homeless and
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reduced
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In conclusion
, it is
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important
for the
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government
to construct
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houses
for the needy in order to
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improve
their
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lives
and standard of living and at the same time reducing the crime rate such as rape, robbery and killing in the communities.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Houses are essential for people. Some argue that governments should offer free houses for people who can not afford to pay for it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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