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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear energy provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree? v.16

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear energy provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 16
It is true that global harmony and unity is maintained by having a nuclear weapon risk. I totally disagree that the benefits of maintaining world peace and cheaper energy outweigh the drawback of mass destruction. Firstly, a nuclear explosion can possibly trigger the human extinction. The destructive effect of nuclear attack if the control of this explosive device is on the hands of an arrogant leader can never be under estimated. For example, the nuclear test initiated in Japan few decades ago affected marine creatures widely. The nuclear reactions brought the mass killing of whales and fish as well as the destruction of coral reefs. Thus, there is a clear indication that the power of nuclear weapon only benefited a few. In addition, the idea that nuclear power is a source of cleaner and cheaper energy does not hold a valid argument. This notion was refuted by many because of the fact that there are more alternative sources of energy that are renewable and sustainable. Good examples are solar energy and wind power. Although the cost of operating the plant was higher because it is still in its experimental stage, in the long run, it is expected to efficiently operate at a minimal cost. This clearly confirms that there is a better option available and relying on the use of nuclear energy is not necessary. In conclusion, although there are advantages of nuclear energy such as international peace and low-cost source of fuel, the high risk of human eradication and other sources of energy should be taken into consideration. I disagree that nuclear power is more important than human life.
It is true that global harmony and unity
is maintained
by having a nuclear weapon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
. I
totally
disagree that the benefits of maintaining world peace and cheaper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
outweigh the drawback of mass destruction.

Firstly
, a nuclear explosion can
possibly
trigger the human extinction. The destructive effect of nuclear attack if the control of this explosive device is on the hands of an arrogant leader can never be under estimated.
For example
, the nuclear
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
initiated in Japan few decades ago
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
marine creatures
widely
. The nuclear reactions brought the mass killing of whales and fish
as well
as the destruction of coral reefs.
Thus
, there is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
indication that the
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power
of nuclear weapon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
benefited a few.

In addition
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
of cleaner and cheaper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
does not hold a valid argument. This notion
was refuted
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "because".
because of the fact that
there are more alternative
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sources
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
that are renewable and sustainable.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Good
examples are solar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
and wind
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
. Although the cost of operating the plant was higher
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is
still
in its experimental stage, in the long run, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to
efficiently
operate at a minimal cost. This
clearly
confirms that there is a better option available and relying on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
is not necessary.

In conclusion
, although there are advantages of nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
such as international peace and low-cost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
of fuel, the high
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of human eradication and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
should
be taken
into consideration. I disagree that nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
is more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
than human life.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear energy provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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