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The tendency of human being to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree? v.1

The tendency of human being to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. v. 1
These days, modern people are willing to purchase the clothes, items and perfumes which are used by their role models. In this regard, many people are reckoned to think that this tendency is showing the popularity of the fashionable clothes and stylish accessories. After pondering this phenomenon, I believe that thanks to this trend, many manufacturers are earning huge revenue. On the one hand, it is true that the consumers are willing to replicate the items of well-known personalities such as actors, sport stars and politicians. Actually, this trend is showing the popularity of the brand, as if the items are made from the cheap materials or do not durable, consumers will not purchase these goods. Furthermore, this tendency is beneficial for the producers, as they can advertise their products though the other people. For example, many beverage companies advertise their drinks though the TV, which is a useful tool for the earning money. On the other hand, some people tend to think that replicating the items is not the sign of the stock, as many individuals are willing to buy these products in order to look like their favourite people. Furthermore, they are keen to think that due to lack of the alternative products, many people are buying these items. To illustrate, monopolies of the big companies are forcing people to buy their products. In this reason, many individuals are keen to think that these trends are not the sign of popularity. In conclusion, although many people believe that the copying things are one of the signs of the vogue of the fashion companies, others feel that individuals are not replicating things because of it. In addition, the monopoly of the fashion companies is forcing the people to purchase their clothes and accessories.
These days, modern
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people
are willing to
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purchase
the clothes,
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items
and perfumes which are
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used
by their role models. In this regard,
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many
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people
are reckoned
to
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think
that this tendency is showing the popularity of the fashionable clothes and stylish accessories. After pondering this phenomenon, I believe that thanks to this trend,
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many
manufacturers are earning huge revenue.

On the one hand, it is true that the consumers are willing to replicate the
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items
of well-known personalities such as actors, sport stars and politicians. Actually, this trend is showing the popularity of the brand, as if the
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items
are made
from the
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cheap
materials or do not durable, consumers will not
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purchase
these
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goods
.
Furthermore
, this tendency is beneficial for the producers, as they can advertise their
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products
though the other
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people
.
For example
,
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many
beverage
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companies
advertise their drinks though the TV, which is a useful tool for the earning money.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
tend to
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think
that replicating the
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items
is not the
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sign
of the stock, as
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many
individuals are willing to
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buy
these
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products
in order to look like their
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favourite
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people
.
Furthermore
, they are keen to
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think
that due to lack of the alternative
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products
,
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many
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people
are buying these
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items
. To illustrate, monopolies of the
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big
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companies
are forcing
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people
to
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buy
their
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products
. In this reason,
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many
individuals are keen to
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think
that these trends are not the
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sign
of popularity.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
believe that the copying things are one of the signs of the vogue of the fashion
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companies
, others feel that individuals are not replicating things
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because
of it.
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In
addition, the monopoly of the fashion
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companies
is forcing the
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people
to
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purchase
their clothes and accessories.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The tendency of human being to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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