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Question: Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? v.2

Question: Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. v. 2
The existence of teachers and students together in a classroom in the next 30 years is debatable. Some people claim that by 2050 the conventional classroom concept of learners and educators under one roof will be completely transformed. I totally disagree with this statement for few reasons like teachers are essential for the guidance and motivation. Firstly, these lectures will always guide the pupils in the proper direction. However, computers may give all the choices, but it cannot insist a learner to follow the right path. Further, teachers being the pedagogical experts teach pupils in an interesting manner. In addition, students can interact with them and discuss complex subjects nevertheless, any number of online tuitions may not simplify the concepts. For instance, despite significant research in the category of medical sciences till date there is no substitute for blood. Similarly, by 2050 there may be a number of innovations in the field of education, however it cannot replace a teacher. Secondly, these mentors are the best motivators. They can be an inspiration for a below average student because they can understand their weak areas and encourage them to overcome their shortfalls. Therefore, it is possible only by interacting in a classroom between learners and educators. For example, I always wanted to become a professor since my childhood because of the influence of my primary teachers. So this concept of motivation can only be possible if there is a healthy interaction with the schools. To conclude, although there might be considerable changes in the system of education by the year 2050 still the classroom learning with a lecturer and a pupil cannot be substituted. A student cannot achieve anything without guidance and motivation from a mentor.
The existence of
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teachers
and
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students
together in a classroom in the
next
30 years is debatable.
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Some
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people
claim that by 2050 the conventional classroom concept of learners and educators under one roof will be completely transformed. I
totally
disagree with this statement for few reasons like
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teachers
are essential for the guidance and motivation.

Firstly
, these lectures will always guide the pupils in the proper direction.
However
, computers may give all the choices,
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but
it cannot insist a learner to follow the right path.
Further
,
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teachers
being the pedagogical experts teach pupils
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in an interesting manner
.
In addition
,
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students
can interact with them and discuss complex subjects
nevertheless
, any number of online
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tuitions
may not simplify the concepts.
For instance
, despite significant research in the category of medical sciences till date there is no substitute for blood.
Similarly
, by 2050 there may be a number of innovations in the field of education,
however
it cannot replace a teacher.

Secondly
, these mentors are the best motivators. They can be an inspiration for a below average
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student
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they can understand their weak areas and encourage them to overcome their shortfalls.
Therefore
, it is possible
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only
by interacting in a classroom between learners and educators.
For example
, I always wanted to become a professor since my childhood
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the influence of my primary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
this concept of motivation can
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only
be possible if there is a healthy interaction with the schools.

To conclude
, although there might be considerable
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changes
in the system of education by the year 2050
still
the classroom learning with a lecturer and a pupil cannot
be substituted
. A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
cannot achieve anything without guidance and motivation from a mentor.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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