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The teenage years are filled with much anxiety. What are some of the things that make you anxious? How do you manage these anxieties? [Expository - 'I']

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The saying goes, “The teenage years are the best years of one’s life”. As a struggling 16-year-old, I cannot beg to differ more. Teenagers are supposed to be leading a wonderfully easy life: full of fun and free of stress. Our sole responsibility is to study hard, which according to adults, is a simple task. However, living the life of a teenager is not that easy. My teenage years are filled with anxieties that I can do without. In this essay, I will share about some things that make me anxious, and how I manage these anxieties. As society becomes more competitive with each passing year, my peers and I face increasing pressure to excel in our academics. For instance, even from a tender age, we are loaded with tons of assessment books. We are drilled to work hard and long, with our well-meaning parents breathing down our necks to make sure that we do well academically. As a consequence, I was brought up to fear failure, thinking I must not let my parents down. My parents impose their unfulfilled dreams and wishes on me, and woes betide me if they I am unable to live up to their high expectations. Some parents will reproach their children and even make deprecating remarks and endless comparisons between them and the neighbours’ children. Eventually, arguments break out and the relationship is strained. Therefore, this causes immense anxiety amongst us teenager. Relationship troubles also cause anxiety in my teenage life. It is common for us teenagers to face problems with our love lives. Curious about many things, I was more than eager to try having a relationship with a person I had feelings for. Though not without good effects, these infatuations have their negative consequences. While the relationship helped me to alleviate the stress of schoolwork by having someone to talk to, it in turn gave rise to emotional pain when it failed to work out. It was the first true heartbreak I ever had, and it did lead me to some apprehension about relationships which affected my daily life. The emotional need to fit in with my peers also resulted in great stress in my school life. Peers are an important influence on behaviour during adolescence and teenagers often find it difficult to resist peer pressure. While peer pressure can have positive effects on teenagers when we are inspired by our peers towards positive behaviour such as volunteering for charity, it can also affect us negatively. This is because peer conformity among teenagers is commonly linked to episodes of adolescent risk-taking like underage drinking, smoking and shoplifting as these activities usually take place in the company of peers. To give an example, I have had experiences of negative peer pressure such as the time when I was pressured into taking a drink without paying for it. Luckily, I stood by my morals at that instant and refused to commit to the act of stealing. From that day on, they excluded me from being their friend, but I have no regrets as they were always up to no good. However, I fear that I may face negative peer pressure from my close friends in the future, which will be easier to succumb to. Therefore, when we associate ourselves with bad company, we may engage in risky behaviours and become juvenile delinquents. Though we may be aware of the consequences of our actions, we may be coerced into doing things that goes against our conscience, and it is these kinds of dilemmas that cause us great anxiety. Despite the myriad of anxieties I face in my daily life, there are many ways for me to overcome these anxieties and move on with my life. To deal with the heavy workload in school, I plan my time between work and play wisely. This ensures that I complete all my work and still have enough time to relax by playing games. This is so that I do not burn myself out. I also share the problems I face with school councellors and my parents. It is always important to have an outlet to communicate with others about your frustrations. Bottling up your emotions will ultimately lead to a mental breakdown. As for peer pressure, I always bear in mind that I am vulnerable to peer pressure, and should always exercise caution when I make new friends. Similarly, when it comes to affairs of the heart, I deliberate over entering into a relationship to avoid unnecessary heartaches. Only when I become more mature and responsible should I seriously think about a romantic involvement. Finally, the various obstacles we face are there for a good reason. As the aphorism goes, “Life is a succession of lessons which must be lived to be understood. ” Once I learned how to cope with each and every problem, I will become stronger and more able to deal with the challenges ahead. Although adolescence may not always be smooth-sailing, it is still a very special phase to be cherished.
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life”
. As a struggling 16-year-
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, I cannot beg to differ more.
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are supposed
to be leading a
wonderfully
easy
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life
: full of fun and free of
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stress
. Our sole responsibility is to study
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hard
, which according to adults, is a simple task.
However
, living the
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life
of a
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teenager
is not that easy. My teenage years
are filled
with
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anxieties
that I can do without. In this essay, I will share about
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some
things that
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make
me anxious, and how I manage these anxieties.

As society
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becomes
more competitive with each passing
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year
, my
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peers
and I
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face
increasing
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pressure
to excel in our academics.
For instance
, even from a tender age, we
are loaded
with tons of assessment books. We
are drilled
to
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work
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hard
and long, with our well-meaning
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parents
breathing down our necks to
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make
sure that we do well
academically
. As a consequence, I
was brought
up to fear failure, thinking I
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must
not
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let
my
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parents
down. My
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parents
impose their unfulfilled dreams and wishes on me, and woes betide me if they I am unable to
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live
up to their high expectations.
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Some
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parents
will reproach their children and even
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make
deprecating remarks and endless comparisons between them and the
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neighbours
’ children.
Eventually
, arguments break out and the
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relationship
is strained
.
Therefore
, this causes immense
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anxiety
amongst us
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teenager
.

Relationship troubles
also
cause
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anxiety
in my teenage
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life
. It is common for us
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teenagers
to
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face
problems with our
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love
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lives
. Curious about
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many
things, I was more than eager to try having a
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relationship
with a person I had feelings for. Though not without
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good
effects, these infatuations have their
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negative
consequences. While the
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relationship
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helped
me to alleviate the
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stress
of schoolwork by having someone to talk to, it in turn gave rise to emotional pain when it failed to
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work
out. It was the
first
true heartbreak I ever had, and it did lead me to
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some
apprehension about
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relationships
which
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affected
my daily life.

The emotional need to fit in with my
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peers
also
resulted in great
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stress
in my school life.

Peers are an
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important
influence on
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behaviour
during adolescence and
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teenagers
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often
find it difficult to resist
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peer
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pressure
. While
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peer
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pressure
can have
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positive
effects on
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teenagers
when we
are inspired
by our
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peers
towards
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positive
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behaviour
such as volunteering for charity, it can
also
affect us
negatively
. This is
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because
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peer
conformity
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among
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teenagers
is
commonly
linked to episodes of adolescent
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risk
-taking like underage drinking, smoking and shoplifting as these activities
usually
take place in the
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company
of
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peers
. To give an example, I have had experiences of
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negative
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peer
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pressure
such as the time when I
was pressured
into taking a drink without paying for it. Luckily, I stood by my morals at that instant and refused to commit to the act of stealing. From that day on, they excluded me from being their friend,
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but
I have no regrets as they were always up to no
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good
.
However
, I fear that I may
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face
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negative
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peer
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pressure
from my close friends in the future, which will be easier to succumb to.
Therefore
, when we associate ourselves with
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bad
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company
, we may engage in risky
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behaviours
and
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become
juvenile delinquents. Though we may be aware of the consequences of our actions, we may
be coerced
into doing things that goes against our conscience, and it is these kinds of dilemmas that cause us great anxiety.

Despite the myriad of
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anxieties
I
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face
in my daily
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life
, there are
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many
ways for me to overcome these
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anxieties
and
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move
on with my
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life
. To deal with the heavy workload in school, I plan my time between
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work
and play
wisely
. This ensures that I complete all my
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work
and
still
have
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enough
time to relax by playing games. This is
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so
that I do not burn myself out. I
also
share the problems I
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face
with school
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councellors
and my parents.

It is always
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important
to have an outlet to communicate with others about your frustrations. Bottling up your emotions will
ultimately
lead to a mental breakdown.

As for
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peer
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pressure
, I always bear in mind that I am vulnerable to
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peer
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pressure
, and should always exercise caution when I
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make
new friends.
Similarly
, when it
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comes
to affairs of the heart, I deliberate over entering into a
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relationship
to avoid unnecessary heartaches.
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Only
when I
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become
more mature and responsible should I
seriously
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think
about a romantic involvement.

Finally
, the various obstacles we
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face
are there for a
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good
reason. As the aphorism goes,
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“Life
is a succession of lessons which
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must
be
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lived
to
be understood
. ” Once I learned how to cope with each and every problem, I will
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become
stronger and more able to deal with the challenges ahead. Although adolescence may not always be smooth-sailing, it is
still
a
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very
special phase to
be cherished
.
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IELTS essay The teenage years are filled with much anxiety. What are some of the things that make you anxious? How do you manage these anxieties? [Expository - 'I']

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
837 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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