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The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six differentcountries over a twenty-year period. v.1

The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six differentcountries over a twenty-year period. v. 1
We live in a world where dangerous activity grows by the day. This has now become problematic for the law abiding citizens. While there are many ways to reduce such incidents, some believe the best method of action at curbing this would be the imprisonment of the offenders. In my opinion prison should be the last resort, as there are many other ways to reduce criminal activity. Imprisonment for some offences can be detrimental. In other words, being sent off to a prison will have a negative effect on someones social status for life thus, enabling the others, such as friends, family members or the even the local community to re-brand the offender and to categorize them as a criminal, even if the offence is minor. For example, in many countries, driving under the influence is considered to be a crime and will be penalised under the criminal law. This will have a negative impact on the offender, as now they will be in the system and be categorized as a criminal. Furthermore, this will also impact their future and commit more crime. Since nowadays almost all employers run a background check before hiring a candidate, they may never be able to find work again, thus making the offender to shift towards performing more crime in order to make a living. Hence, sending a perpetrator to a rehabilitation centre or perform community work would make them understand and teach a valuable lesson rather than a permanent black spot on their life. Less serious crimes should be given a different punishment rather than jail time. Critics in favour of jail time point out that offenders with serious crimes such as repeated sex offenders, sex traffickers, serial killers should be given imprisonment for life or even capital punishment which is true nevertheless, I would argue that that less serious offenders may get the motivation and skills required from high-level criminals to make more serious crimes when thrown into jail as, in many locations prisons are shared between the two categories due to capacity issues. Which will increase more criminals rather than reducing. In conclusion, sentencing to jail can tarnish someones social status and their future career growth. In addition, low-level offenders should be given an alternative punishment rather than mixing them with other high-level offenders.
We
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live
in a world where
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dangerous
activity grows by the day. This has
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now
become problematic for the
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law abiding
citizens. While there are
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many
ways to
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reduce
such incidents,
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some
believe the best method of action at curbing this would be the imprisonment of the
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offenders
. In my opinion prison should be the last resort, as there are
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many
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other
ways to
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reduce
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criminal
activity.

Imprisonment for
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some
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offences
can be detrimental. In
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other
words, being
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sent
off to a prison will have a
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negative
effect on someones social status for life
thus
, enabling the others, such as friends, family members or the even the local community to re-brand the
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offender
and to categorize them as a
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criminal
, even if the
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offence
is minor.
For example
, in
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many
countries, driving under the influence
is considered
to be a
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crime
and will be
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penalised
under the
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criminal
law. This will have a
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negative
impact on the
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offender
, as
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now
they will be in the system and
be categorized
as a
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criminal
.
Furthermore
, this will
also
impact their future and commit more
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crime
. Since nowadays almost all employers run a background
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check
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before
hiring a candidate, they may never be able to find work again,
thus
making the
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offender
to shift towards performing more
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crime
in order to
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make
a living.
Hence
, sending a perpetrator to a rehabilitation
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centre
or perform community work would
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make
them understand and teach a valuable lesson
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rather
than a permanent black spot on their life.

Less
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serious
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crimes
should be
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given
a
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different
punishment
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rather
than
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jail
time. Critics in
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favour
of
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jail
time point out that
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offenders
with
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serious
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crimes
such as repeated sex
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offenders
, sex traffickers, serial killers should be
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given
imprisonment for life or even capital punishment which is true
nevertheless
, I would argue that that less
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serious
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offenders
may
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get
the motivation and
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skills
required from high-level
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criminals
to
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make
more
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serious
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crimes
when thrown into
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jail
as, in
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many
locations prisons
are shared
between the two categories due to capacity issues.
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Which
will increase more
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criminals
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rather
than reducing.

In conclusion
, sentencing to
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jail
can tarnish someones social status and their future career growth.
In addition
, low-level
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offenders
should be
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given
an alternative punishment
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rather
than mixing them with
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other
high-level
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offenders
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six differentcountries over a twenty-year period. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
383 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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