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The table and chart provide information about unemployment and owning a home in selected European countries

The table and chart provide information about unemployment and owning a home in selected European countries 7pMY3
The chart shows information about the rate of the home and unemployment rate in 2015 and the table shows how people want to own a home for two different years. Both table and chart are showing the data for nine countries. As you can see in the chart, Italy had the highest percentage rate in the home ownership and the unemployment while Switzerland had the lowest rate for both cases. Germany has higher rate for home ownership than Switzerland but the unemployment rate was similar to the former one. Although Belgium had the second highest home ownership rate, the unemployment rate was just 8%. UK also had the high ownership rate with the low rate of unemployment. The table show the result of nine different countries with the order of the change column. The countries are ordered by smallest to largest numbers for the differences between 2005 and 2015. The highest country was Switzerland with the difference of -3 while Italy is the biggest difference with 5. Other countries were showing the differences with groups (-2, 0 and 4 for two countries and -1 for one country. )
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of the home and
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unemployment
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rate
in 2015 and the table
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a home for two
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different
years. Both table and chart are showing the data for nine countries.

As you can
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in the chart, Italy had the highest percentage
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rate
in the home
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ownership
and the
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unemployment
while Switzerland had the lowest
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rate
for both cases. Germany has higher
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rate
for home
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ownership
than Switzerland
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but
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unemployment
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rate
was similar to the former one. Although Belgium had the second highest home
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ownership
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rate
, the
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unemployment
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rate
was
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just
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had the high
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ownership
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with the low
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rate
of unemployment.

The table
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the result of nine
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with the order of the
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column. The
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countries
are ordered
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largest
numbers for the
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differences
between 2005 and 2015.
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The
highest
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country
was Switzerland with the
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difference
of -3 while Italy is the biggest
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difference
with 5. Other
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countries
were showing the
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with groups (-2, 0 and 4 for two
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countries
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IELTS essay The table and chart provide information about unemployment and owning a home in selected European countries

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3 paragraphs
187 words
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