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In present, Internet is stealing to children's interesting free times the reason for utilise a lot. This essay will discuss the problem, give some reasons and provide several solution. First of all, a plethora of kids have been their demanding social networks. It is controling to children's brain. They are lazy and careless which play to different dangerous games. Majority pupils are not managed hardly by their parents. As a consequence, they would prefer to play this games rather than read books. In generally, it do not control them an account of ones. This is tremendous global problem in order to their loved ones have panicked that they forgot to real life and they cheated by various games. It does perilous impact. There are a myriad of solution. Mainly, parents have to divite correctly to children's free times which they must give a true upbringing. Then, they can introduce from social networks, evenly. Their parents ought to preach it. Afterwards, they are occupied with internet. Most of the time, they have noticed to time-saving a lot. For instance, 80 percent kids have come across to that a big problem. Eventually, some children have understood to the various way and they have returned. In light of this evidence, as far as possible, youngers have to think they live in the real life which they should achieve to success. This problem is solved when their parents have to instruct to use from everything. Then, their condition is to a position from a negative.
In present, Internet is stealing to children's interesting free times the reason for
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utilise
a lot. This essay will discuss the
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problem
, give
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some
reasons and provide
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several solution
.

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First of all
, a plethora of kids have been their demanding social networks. It is
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controling
to children's brain. They are lazy and careless which play to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
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dangerous
games. Majority pupils are not managed hardly by their
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parents
. As a consequence, they would prefer to play this games
rather
than read books. In
generally
, it
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do
not control them an account of ones. This is tremendous global
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problem
in order to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
ones have panicked that they forgot to real
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life and
they cheated by various games. It does perilous impact.

There are a
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myriad
of solution.
Mainly
,
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parents
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have to
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divite
correctly
to children's free times which they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
give a true upbringing. Then, they can introduce from social networks,
evenly
. Their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
ought to preach it. Afterwards, they
are occupied
with internet. Most of the time, they have noticed to time-saving a lot.
For instance
, 80 percent kids have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
across to that a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
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problem
.
Eventually
,
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some
children have understood to the various
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
way and
they have returned.

In light of this evidence, as far as possible, youngers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the real life which they should achieve to success. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
is solved
when their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
instruct to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
from everything. Then, their condition is to a position from a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
.

IELTS essay Some people are trying to get

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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