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the table above shows changes in the number of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011 v.1

the table above shows changes in the number of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011 v. 1
IT IS 100% TRUE THAT WHEN TERRITORY HAS PEOPLE FROM OTHER NAIONS, THE RERITPRY'S GROWTH AND REFORMATION BOOST AT UNCOUNTABLE RATE. THIS ESSAY WILL COMPLETELY CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE NOTION DUE TO THE MAJOR BENEFIT FROM IMMIGRATING PEOPLE FOR THE TERRITOPRY. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW MULTICULTURAL INDIVIDUAL CONTRUBUTE TO THE COUNTRY GROWTH AND DEVELOPMENT. SECONDLY, HOW IT MAKES A NATION EXCITINNG FOR LIVING. FIRTST AND FOR MOST, THE MAJOR CAUSE BEHIND THE NATINS GROWTH THROUGH DISTICT NATIONALITIES IS THE NUMBER OF SKILLED WORKERS FROM ALL OVER THE GLOBE. THE MIGRATED PEOPLE GET A EMPLYOMENT IN THEIR HIGH SKILLES FIELD THAT ALLOW THEM TO EARN A MYRIAD AMOUNT OF MONEY. THIS WILL LEAD THEM TO PAY MORE TAX ACCORDING TO THE REGIME LAW. AS A RESULT, THE REGIND HAS ENOUGH TO MAKE BETTER CHANCES AROUND THE NATION. FOR EXAMPLE, ACCORDING TO THE AUSTRALIAN GOVERNMENT, 80% OF THE FUNDING THEYNGET FROM MIGARTING PEOPLE FROM OTHER COUNTRY. THUS, IT IS BELIEVED THAT HAVING MULTICULTURAL PEOPLE CONTRIBUTE TO THE COUNTRY'S DEVELOPMENT. ADDITIONALLY, THE PRIME TEASON OF MAKING THE TERRITPRY EXCITING IS THE HAVING DIVERT CULTURE OF THE MIGRATED FOLKS FROM DISTICT NATIONS. AS THEYY BELOMG TO SOME OTHER NATION WHERE THEY BORN AND THEY HAVE URGE TO FOLLOW THEIR OWN RELIGION AND RETUALS AFTER MIRATING AS WELL. CONSEQUENTLY, THIS WILL MAKE NATIVE INDIVIDUAL AN EXCITING TO KNOW ABOUT THEIR RETUALS AND FIND IT INTERESTING. NONETHELESS, SOMETIME NATIVE FOLKS AFRAID OF LOSSING THIER MOTHER CULTURE TO SOM EXTENT. FOR INSTANCE, AS PER THE CANADIAN CULTURAL SOCIETY, NOW THE CANADA HAS 80% OF THE DIVERT CULTURAL DUE TO THE SURGE IN THE NUMBER OF MIGRATING FOLKS EVERY YEAR. IN CONCLUSION, HAVING A MULTICULTURAL NATIONALITIES INDEED PROVIDE AN ENORMOUS AMOUNT OF ADVATAGESTO THE TERRITORY. NONETHELESS, THE AUTHORITY SHOULD ALSO TAKE CARE OF THEI OWN CULTURE BY IMPLIMENTING A REGOROUS RULES FOR INCOMING FOREIGN NATIONALS.
IT IS 100% TRUE THAT WHEN TERRITORY HAS
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FROM OTHER
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NAIONS
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RERITPRY
'S GROWTH AND REFORMATION BOOST AT UNCOUNTABLE RATE. THIS ESSAY WILL COMPLETELY CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE NOTION DUE TO THE MAJOR BENEFIT FROM IMMIGRATING
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FOR THE
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TERRITOPRY
.
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CONTRUBUTE
TO THE COUNTRY GROWTH AND DEVELOPMENT.
SECONDLY
, HOW IT
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MAKES
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NATION
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EXCITINNG
FOR LIVING.

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FIRTST
AND FOR MOST, THE MAJOR CAUSE BEHIND THE
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NATINS
GROWTH THROUGH
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DISTICT
NATIONALITIES IS THE NUMBER OF SKILLED WORKERS FROM ALL OVER THE GLOBE. THE MIGRATED
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PEOPLE
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GET
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EMPLYOMENT
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SKILLES
FIELD THAT
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ALLOW
THEM TO EARN A MYRIAD AMOUNT OF MONEY. THIS WILL LEAD THEM TO PAY MORE TAX ACCORDING TO THE REGIME LAW.
AS A RESULT
, THE
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REGIND
HAS
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TO
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MAKE
BETTER CHANCES AROUND THE
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NATION
.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ACCORDING TO THE AUSTRALIAN
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GOVERNMENT
, 80% OF THE FUNDING
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THEYNGET
FROM
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MIGARTING
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PEOPLE
FROM OTHER COUNTRY.
THUS
, IT
IS BELIEVED
THAT HAVING MULTICULTURAL
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PEOPLE
CONTRIBUTE TO THE COUNTRY'S DEVELOPMENT.

ADDITIONALLY
, THE PRIME
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TEASON
OF MAKING THE
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TERRITPRY
EXCITING IS THE HAVING DIVERT CULTURE OF THE MIGRATED FOLKS FROM
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DISTICT
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. AS
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THEYY
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BELOMG
TO
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OTHER
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NATION
WHERE THEY
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BORN
AND THEY HAVE URGE TO FOLLOW THEIR
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RELIGION AND
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RETUALS
AFTER
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MIRATING
AS WELL
.
CONSEQUENTLY
, THIS WILL
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NATIVE INDIVIDUAL AN EXCITING TO KNOW ABOUT THEIR
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RETUALS
AND FIND IT INTERESTING. NONETHELESS, SOMETIME NATIVE FOLKS AFRAID OF
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LOSSING
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THIER
MOTHER CULTURE TO
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EXTENT.
FOR INSTANCE
, AS PER THE CANADIAN CULTURAL SOCIETY,
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NOW
THE CANADA HAS 80% OF
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THE DIVERT
CULTURAL DUE TO THE SURGE IN THE NUMBER OF MIGRATING FOLKS EVERY YEAR.

IN CONCLUSION
, HAVING A MULTICULTURAL
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NATIONALITIES
INDEED
PROVIDE AN ENORMOUS AMOUNT OF
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ADVATAGESTO
THE TERRITORY. NONETHELESS, THE AUTHORITY SHOULD
ALSO
TAKE CARE OF
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THEI
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REGOROUS
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RULES
FOR INCOMING FOREIGN NATIONALS.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay the table above shows changes in the number of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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