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the sudden things you have seen

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On the way somewhere, the boy saw a girl riding a bicycle. Suddenly, her bag fell to the road, and she still went riding and didn't know this. Immediately, the boy picked up the bag and called her so that he could give the girl's bag to her. After hearing someone who called her, she stopped riding to wait for the boy running to her position. She was really surprised when the boy called her and gave her the bag. Then, she thanked the boy for that.
On the way somewhere, the
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a girl riding a bicycle.
Suddenly
, her
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bag
fell to the road, and she
still
went riding and didn't know this. Immediately, the
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boy
picked up the
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bag
and called her
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so
that he could give the girl's
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bag
to her. After hearing someone who called her, she
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stopped
riding to wait for the
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boy
running to her position. She was
really
surprised when the
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boy
called her and gave her the
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bag
. Then, she thanked the
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boy
for that.
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IELTS essay the sudden things you have seen

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
87 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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