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Some people believe that in today’s modern times, with increased access to various forms of entertainment, it is no longer necessary for parents to spend time reading to children or telling them stories. While it may be true that children today have access to more stimulation than ever before, I fear this argument overlooks the many other benefits of story time to both the children and parents. The increased availability of a variety of stories through varied platforms gives children of all ages greater access to new and exciting worlds. Where parents would traditionally be able to share one or two stories in a day, a child today can engage with a different story every hour or two. This helps build creativity and grows a child’s sense of the world around them. Because of the range of mediums, children learn to interpret and engage with a story through other senses beyond just listening. The improved graphics in TV and movies have opened up whole worlds of characters that come to life in a new and exciting way not previously possible.
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other benefits of
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time to both the
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and parents.

The increased availability of a variety of
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stories
through varied platforms gives
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children
of all ages greater access to new and exciting worlds. Where parents would
traditionally
be able to share one or two
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stories
in a day, a child
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today
can engage with a
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different
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build creativity and grows a child’s sense of the world around them.
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of the range of mediums,
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learn to interpret and engage with a
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through other senses beyond
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listening. The
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graphics in TV and movies have opened up whole worlds of characters that
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to life in a new and exciting way not previously possible.
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IELTS essay The statistic compare how women and men

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
180 words
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