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The shopping mall in 1985 and 2005

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The given pictures illustrate the shopping centre in 1985 and its development in 2005. Overall, the mall has been changed under the contraction and alteration trend over the period of 20 years. Probably, the most noticeable modification is that 6 cinemas in the south concern of the mall have been moved into vacant with. In the food court, the food stall in the centre has been abated. There were food stalls but it has been replaced into the cafe in the west next to the entrance while the videos shop has been transformed into electronics and the deletion of the gift shop on a similar side. Another change was the removal of the fountain in the hub of the north courtyard and the bookstore that was in the between of women’s clothing and sporting goods of the east of the shopping centre. However, the shopping mall has many places that are unaltered. The main entrance and 2 sides door in directions west and east with the department store have not been changed. It still was the women’s clothing, sporting goods shop and a bank with an ATM on the left side while on the right, it was still a card shop and the jewellery shop.
The
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given
pictures illustrate the shopping
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centre
in 1985 and its development in 2005.
Overall
, the mall has been
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changed
under the contraction and alteration trend over the period of 20 years.

Probably
, the most noticeable modification is that 6 cinemas in the south concern of the mall have been
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moved
into vacant with. In the food court, the food stall in the
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centre
has
been abated
. There were food stalls
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but
it has
been replaced
into the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
in the west
next
to the entrance while the videos
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shop
has
been transformed
into electronics and the deletion of the gift
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shop
on a similar side. Another
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change
was the removal of the fountain in the hub of the north courtyard and the bookstore that was in the between of women’s clothing and sporting
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goods
of the east of the shopping
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centre
.

However
, the shopping mall has
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many
places that
are unaltered
. The main entrance and 2 sides door in directions west and east with the department store have not been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
. It
still
was the women’s clothing, sporting
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goods
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shop
and a bank with an ATM on the
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left
side while on the right, it was
still
a card
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shop
and the
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jewellery
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shop
.
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IELTS essay The shopping mall in 1985 and 2005

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
205 words
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