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The sample gives the information about the salary spent by the american in 2013

The sample gives the information about the salary spent by the american in 2013 7r723
The sample under consideration reveals the data of the salary to expenditure by the residents of the USA according to their age in 2013. The data is calibrated in dollars. The overall analysis suggests that the age group of 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 had the equal amount of income and had spent the merely similar proportion of their salary. Apart from this, age of 25 they have least salary as compared to the other people of other age group. Where as the people of age from 25 to 75 had utilized the less amount of money as compared to their income. At the fleeting glance, the people of age 35 to 44 and 45 to 55 had the highest and equal amount of income which was near about 80000 and also their spendings were similar which were of 60000 in 2013. Moreover, the least salary were given to the people under 25 age which was less the 20000 but they spent the money more then their income which was 20000. On scrutinizing further, amaricans of age upto 75 had the expenses of the 100% of their income which was measured as upto 30000. It is vivid that the people between the age of 25 to 34 had spent near to 50000 and aslo saved close to 10000 from their salaries.
The sample under consideration reveals the data of the
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salary
to expenditure by the residents of the USA according to their
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age
in 2013. The data
is calibrated
in dollars.

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The
overall
analysis suggests that the
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age
group of 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 had the equal amount of
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income
and had spent the
merely
similar proportion of their
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salary
. Apart from this,
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age
of 25 they have
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least
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salary
as compared to the other
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people
of other
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age
group.
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Where as
the
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people
of
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age
from 25 to 75 had utilized the less amount of money as compared to their income.

At the fleeting glance, the
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people
of
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age
35 to 44 and 45 to 55 had the highest and equal amount of
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income
which was near about 80000 and
also
their
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spendings
were similar which were of 60000 in 2013.
Moreover
, the least
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salary
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to the
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people
under 25
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age
which was less the 20000
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but
they spent the money more
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
then
their
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income
which was 20000.

On scrutinizing
further
,
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amaricans
of
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age
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upto
75 had the expenses of the 100% of their
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income
which
was measured
as
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upto
30000. It is vivid that the
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people
between the
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age
of 25 to 34 had spent near to 50000 and
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aslo
saved close to 10000 from their
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salaries
.
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IELTS essay The sample gives the information about the salary spent by the american in 2013

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
223 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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