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The flow chart shows the detailed process of using digital technology to produce digital pictures, including the role of digital camera, smart card, computer and finally the photo printer. v.1

The flow chart shows the detailed process of using digital technology to produce digital pictures, including the role of digital camera, smart card, computer and finally the photo printer. v. 1
Nowadays, we can search for almost any info online by just a few clicks. This, however raise a question that whether printed books still have any place in modern society? Despite both have their own pros and cons, I’ll have to slightly disagree with this opinion. The Internet is a great resource of knowledges where you can look up almost anything with ease. With around 1. 5 billion websites existing right now, this source of knowledges is very large and a variety of types. Provided that you’re connected, if you want to find different types of information like: data, numbers, fact, … of different topics by books, it would be really time-consuming and require tons of efforts. Just by some typing and clicking, an ocean of information that you needed is right in front of you. However, due to the information online being easily uploaded by anyone, you need to be beware of false information and filter out the ones that are fact-checked. Secondly, the Internet provides you not only a great source of information but also a much larger data to save and share the knowledges you have in a very small, light physical object compare to printed books, which is very convenient for small places. Moreover, by using electronic books, you can somehow save the endangered environment. Physical books are mostly formed of many paper pages, which are the result of cutting down forests which plays an important role in protecting the environment. By using virtual books, you can not only have access to numerous source of information, but also affect the environment less than physical books. Despite of the said strength of the Internet, physical books still, to this day have some advantages that will keep it far from being unimportant. Firstly, books are an important source of various knowledges that have been revised and updated many times by numerous writers, so you usually don’t have to worry about its accuracy. Secondly, by holding a printed book to read, you can actually improve your concentration. People who use e-books can be easily distracted due to the convenience of accessing anything in a few seconds and fall down the endless rabbit hole of the Internet and just wait your precious time. Thirdly, reading printed books can actually help you to reduce visual fatigue. Spending many of your times before the screen with artificial light can affect deeply to your vision health, including blurred vision, redness and even your sleep. Reading physical books on the other hand, provided with enough light will not cause you these symptoms and it can help you have a better, deeper sleep. In addition, reading physical books have some joy value that you won’t get from reading electronic ones. There’s something very special about the feeling of holding a physical books, smelling the newly printed pages and read it in a tranquil atmosphere that make it a unique form of entertainment that can help you to relax after having a strenuous day. With that being said, we can now conclude that physical and digital sources of knowledge both have their own advantages and disadvantages which have shown that neither of them are perfect. Both of them are great and necessary sources of information and neither are to be missed. If we know how to use them in a proper way, we can have our wisdom widened, in the most effective way.
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printed
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books
still
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where you can look up almost anything with
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. With around 1. 5 billion websites existing right
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, this
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of
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knowledges
is
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very
large and a variety of types. Provided that you’re connected, if you want to find
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different
types of
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information
like: data, numbers, fact, … of
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different
topics by
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books
, it would be
really
time-consuming and require tons of efforts.
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by
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some
typing and clicking, an ocean of
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information
that you needed is right in front of you.
However
, due to the
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information
online being
easily
uploaded by anyone, you need to be
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beware
of false
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information
and filter out the ones that are fact-
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checked
.
Secondly
, the Internet provides you not
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only
a great
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source
of
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information
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but
also
a much larger data to save and share the
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knowledges
you have in a
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very
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small
, light
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physical
object compare to
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printed
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books
, which is
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very
convenient for
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small
places.
Moreover
, by using electronic
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books
, you can somehow save the endangered environment.
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Physical
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books
are
mostly
formed of
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many
paper pages, which are the result of cutting down forests which plays an
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important
role in protecting the environment. By using virtual
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books
, you can not
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only
have access to numerous
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source
of
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information
,
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but
also
affect the environment less than
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physical
books.

Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
the said strength of the Internet,
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physical
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books
still
, to this day have
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some
advantages that will
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keep
it far from being unimportant.
Firstly
,
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books
are an
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important
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source
of various
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knowledges
that have
been revised
and updated
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many
times by numerous writers,
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so
you
usually
don’t
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have to
worry about its accuracy.
Secondly
, by holding a
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printed
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book
to read, you can actually
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improve
your concentration.
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People
who
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use
e-books can be
easily
distracted due to the convenience of accessing anything in a few seconds and fall down the endless rabbit hole of the Internet and
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just
wait your precious time.
Thirdly
,
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reading
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printed
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books
can actually
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help
you to
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reduce
visual fatigue. Spending
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many
of your times
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before
the screen with artificial light can affect
deeply
to your vision health, including blurred vision, redness and even your sleep.
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Reading
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physical
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books
on the other hand
, provided with
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enough
light will not cause you these symptoms and it can
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help
you have a better, deeper sleep.
In addition
,
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reading
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physical
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books
have
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some
joy value that you won’t
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get
from
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reading
electronic ones. There’s something
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very
special about the feeling of holding a
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physical
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books
, smelling the
newly
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printed
pages and read it in a tranquil atmosphere that
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make
it a unique form of entertainment that can
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help
you to relax after having a strenuous day.

With that
being said
, we can
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now
conclude that
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physical
and digital
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sources
of
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knowledge
both have their
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own
advantages and disadvantages which have shown that neither of them are perfect. Both of them are great and necessary
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sources
of
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information
and neither are to
be missed
. If we know how to
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use
them
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in a proper way
, we can have our wisdom widened, in the most effective way.
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IELTS essay The flow chart shows the detailed process of using digital technology to produce digital pictures, including the role of digital camera, smart card, computer and finally the photo printer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
567 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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